I am Poor

January 25, 2013
By awray0 GOLD, Seymour, Indiana
awray0 GOLD, Seymour, Indiana
11 articles 6 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be very careful if you make a woman cry, because God counts her tears. The woman came out of a man’s rib: Not from his feet to be walked on. Not from his head to be superior, but from the side to be equal. Under the arm to be protected, and next to the heart to be loved.”

live laught love

hope is love and forgivness

live life as if you die tomorrow

fake it till you make it

face up to the music an grab the bull by the horns

you never lose by loving you lose by holding back

its alright letting yourself go as long as you can get yourself back up

she never gave up on my mom is my hero

my mom had a great deal of trouble with me but i think she enjoyed it

i dont judge you for what you belief in so why judge mine.


Yes it's true you see for I am poor as I can be. I sleep in my box for a decent nights sleep. I get my food from a dumpster and yes it's gross as can be.I don't like to beg or plea but could you please rescue me. I hate living on the streets, I hate this scary place. People look at me like I have a distorted face. I'm just like them maybe less clean. My hair is grease and my skin is marked. My stomach is starvin and my body shows, for my ribs have appeared clear and bold. Today a little girl skipped by her smile resembled mine. She stopped skip an walked over to me. She offered me five dollars to get something to eat. I went to the Creek to get myself clean. Then I went to the diner to satisfy my hunger. So thank you sweet girl for your my Angel. For without your five dollars I would be no longer.


The author's comments:
This is about a woman who is poor and nobody is willing to help her because she is homeless and dirty. Until a special person skips by.

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on Jan. 28 2013 at 9:54 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 861 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Great! It's really beautiful; you should just work on creating the stanzas and lines so it's easier to read. Otherwise, however, this is magnificent and you've done a splendid job.

awray0 GOLD said...
on Jan. 28 2013 at 3:52 pm
awray0 GOLD, Seymour, Indiana
11 articles 6 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be very careful if you make a woman cry, because God counts her tears. The woman came out of a man’s rib: Not from his feet to be walked on. Not from his head to be superior, but from the side to be equal. Under the arm to be protected, and next to the heart to be loved.”

live laught love

hope is love and forgivness

live life as if you die tomorrow

fake it till you make it

face up to the music an grab the bull by the horns

you never lose by loving you lose by holding back

its alright letting yourself go as long as you can get yourself back up

she never gave up on my mom is my hero

my mom had a great deal of trouble with me but i think she enjoyed it

i dont judge you for what you belief in so why judge mine.

Hey everyone if you like this one you should read Black and Blue it was just approved. It has the emotions that some of you sugested I work on. Please Rate, Comment, Suggest me to your friends. It would mean the world to me.

awray0 GOLD said...
on Jan. 28 2013 at 1:38 pm
awray0 GOLD, Seymour, Indiana
11 articles 6 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be very careful if you make a woman cry, because God counts her tears. The woman came out of a man’s rib: Not from his feet to be walked on. Not from his head to be superior, but from the side to be equal. Under the arm to be protected, and next to the heart to be loved.”

live laught love

hope is love and forgivness

live life as if you die tomorrow

fake it till you make it

face up to the music an grab the bull by the horns

you never lose by loving you lose by holding back

its alright letting yourself go as long as you can get yourself back up

she never gave up on my mom is my hero

my mom had a great deal of trouble with me but i think she enjoyed it

i dont judge you for what you belief in so why judge mine.

I'm sorry you had to go through that. Hope everything is going good in your life now. I'm been lucky enought to never had to exsperience homelessness. Please read my others and give your feedbacks. As my Grandma says "Theres always room for improvement". 

awray0 GOLD said...
on Jan. 28 2013 at 1:34 pm
awray0 GOLD, Seymour, Indiana
11 articles 6 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be very careful if you make a woman cry, because God counts her tears. The woman came out of a man’s rib: Not from his feet to be walked on. Not from his head to be superior, but from the side to be equal. Under the arm to be protected, and next to the heart to be loved.”

live laught love

hope is love and forgivness

live life as if you die tomorrow

fake it till you make it

face up to the music an grab the bull by the horns

you never lose by loving you lose by holding back

its alright letting yourself go as long as you can get yourself back up

she never gave up on my mom is my hero

my mom had a great deal of trouble with me but i think she enjoyed it

i dont judge you for what you belief in so why judge mine.

Thank you for your feedback putting more emotion is something I need to work on. Feel free to read my others and give me your feedback. Anyway to make my stuff better is always a plus.

on Jan. 28 2013 at 11:16 am
LoveLikeEpic GOLD, Boise, Idaho
11 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You got enemies? Good, that means you actually stood up for something in you life"-Eminem
How can i go forward if i dont know which way im facing?-John Lennon

This is super beautiful. I've been homeless twice, and I know exactly how this situation feels. Keep up you're writing, love!

on Jan. 28 2013 at 5:14 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

A very good and touching poem. Just as brockili said you could use a bit more emotions to give it a more enhancing effect.

on Jan. 28 2013 at 5:13 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

A very good and touching poem. Just as brockili said you could use a bit more emotions to give it a more enhancing effect.

on Jan. 28 2013 at 5:12 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

A very good and touching poem. Just as brockili said you could use a bit more emotions to give it a more enhancing effect.

awray0 GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2013 at 11:56 pm
awray0 GOLD, Seymour, Indiana
11 articles 6 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Be very careful if you make a woman cry, because God counts her tears. The woman came out of a man’s rib: Not from his feet to be walked on. Not from his head to be superior, but from the side to be equal. Under the arm to be protected, and next to the heart to be loved.”

live laught love

hope is love and forgivness

live life as if you die tomorrow

fake it till you make it

face up to the music an grab the bull by the horns

you never lose by loving you lose by holding back

its alright letting yourself go as long as you can get yourself back up

she never gave up on my mom is my hero

my mom had a great deal of trouble with me but i think she enjoyed it

i dont judge you for what you belief in so why judge mine.

Ill have to work on that in my furture poems fill free to read my other ones and give me your opionons on them.

on Jan. 27 2013 at 11:31 pm
Brockili123 BRONZE, Loves Park, Illinois
2 articles 0 photos 13 comments
Good poem. I think it could really be improved by describing more emotion the old woman felt while being poor... Good Job!


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