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Stupid Naive Love

You promised me forever
Naive as could be i believed you
i trusted your every word
i never knew you'd leave me to hurt
thought our hearts beat as one
but i confused that with your tactics
thought our hearts made a pleasant beat
but now all i hear is static
shame on me i was fooled again
love is a master
its could never let me win
i guess its my fault
i should have never let you in
i feel my heart shattering
but the feeling is ever so common
My face is so used to
all the tears, of me sobbing
stupid me, to have faith in you
i should've seen it in you
but i'm not phyic
i had no clue
my heart is permanently scarred
i wear my head on my arms
tears run endlessly
and only hurt runs in me
i'm so hurt and so weak
stupid and naive
i make too many mistakes
and i am not perfect
maybe thats the reason you don't see me as worth it
maybe thats the reason i'm always left hurting
the reason i'm always left with used to be
and it always end in you without me
and pain is never an absentee
my space in the window
never misses me
because i'm never gone to long
i know every word to that break up song
every time
i know the outcome
but love i just can't keep from
i know there lies but i still believe
thats i would just pretend
than happiness can be achieved
i trusted in you
and lost trust in me
silly stupid me
i stare at my scars
and then i go in for more
i want love
but not this way
love can't be betrayed
because i need it
i feen it
even though i often hurt
and treated like dirt
i still believe somewhere there's hope
even though the clouds are grey
i can't predict a rainy day
so i fall in traps
give love a break perhaps ?
but i just can't break free !



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jess14 said...
Apr. 5, 2013 at 2:16 pm:
wow omg omg this is so amazing i once had a boyfriend and he dumped me and i felt like this please keep writn gyou are an inspire to us all 
 
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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 5, 2013 at 2:14 pm:
Great job totally skilled!!!! yo u got talent keep it up be ambitious
 
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mnm08 said...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 1:22 pm:
that was really well written and i loved the emotion in the piece :) rlly amazing, great job!
 
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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 6:43 pm:
Hi! The vocabulary in here is very good, just make sure to proof-read! There is a clear beat in here and the poem flows pretty nicely. It does not feel like the ryhmes were forced, so that's really good. I think this is a really good poem, keep it up! Xx!
 
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HannahBanana99This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 5:45 pm:
I loved this poem! It was very sad but thorough and strong. My fav part was "i still believe somewhere there's hope even though the clouds are grey i can't predict a rainy day so i fall in traps give love a break perhaps ? but i just can't break free !" It was very good, but maybe making it a little shorter would make it even better :)
 
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laurengerhard This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 12:28 pm:
There's a few words that are spelt wrong or are the wrong form of the word... Other than that, you did well. I like your ideas. Just make sure to proofread thoroughly.
 
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kaitlynisweird said...
Jan. 24, 2013 at 4:18 pm:
I liked the poem and unfortunately, it's very relateable. Let me give you a word of advice - you can take it if you want, but you don't have to because the poem's yours, not mine. I personally think this poem's a bit repetitive, not in terms of the actual words, and phrases, but in terms of the point. Like, I got the poem almost from the beginning, and it kind of dragged on. If you want to shorten it a little bit to the most powerful lines, I'd suggest doing that. This is jus... (more »)
 
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