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Everyone's a slave
That is true to me 
Whether it be to school or work
It seems if no one is truly free

Everyone's a slave
So few choose their own destiny
For some people 
That all want be

But then, some are free
The dreamers and the schemers 
The idealistic and optimistic 
The inspired are make up perspire 
To acquire a life of want to be 
Their hope and dream 
For only creature that create have liberty 

For unless you have a dream 
You will never be free



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theatregirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 7:02 pm:
Thanks for the feedback. Yeah, I'll work on the flow. This is an older piece, from like 6 months ago, but I think I done a bit more to improve my style since then.thanks again for the comment.
 
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StarGazer9This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 4:23 pm:
Nice job on this! I would advise you to make it flow more though
 
theatregirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
today at 7:04 pm :
Thanks for the feedback. I will have work on my style and poetic structure. This is and older piece, from like 6 months ago, and I think I've done a bit more work on the flow of pieces since then. Thanks again for the feedback
 
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