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Never Forgotten

I was drowning in my tears as you left and walked away
You never looked or turned around, no chance that you would stay
I cared for you, you cared for me, but our thoughts would be reversed
Such graceful verses to our song, but the chorus, unrehearsed
Through weeks and months of constant dread, you were always on my mind
Hoping you would see my heart, but still your eyes were blind
One day you walked right next to me, my eyes locked onto you
I thought of all the times we shared, I knew that you did too
As we passed I looked back once, and smiled when I did see
That you were stopped in clear daylight, staring back at me



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Padoodallee said...
Jan. 17, 2013 at 7:50 pm:
My favorite of your poems so far! You surrounded the meaning of your poem in a great story that leaves me thinking about what happened. I agree with Skyowesmerain. Rhyming and the rythm are natural and don't distract from the actual meaning of the poem. Great Job! it would be really awesome if you could read/rate/comment on a few of my poems =)
 
seriouslyjustkidding replied...
Jan. 17, 2013 at 9:12 pm :
Thank you for the comment! And I definitely will! 
 
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TheSkyOwesMeRainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 17, 2013 at 12:43 am:
Great job! I especially loved the steady rhythm you kept throughout the poem, and the rhyming as well. Sometimes people manipulate the poem so that it fits the rhyme, but I think you did really really well; it sounded really natural. :) Satisfactory ending too!
 
seriouslyjustkidding replied...
Jan. 17, 2013 at 3:48 am :
I appreciate that! Always good to hear feedback on my work! Thanks!
 
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