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Never Forgotten

January 8, 2013
By seriouslyjustkidding SILVER, Irwin, Pennsylvania
seriouslyjustkidding SILVER, Irwin, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore!" - Edgar Allan Poe


I was drowning in my tears as you left and walked away
You never looked or turned around, no chance that you would stay
I cared for you, you cared for me, but our thoughts would be reversed
Such graceful verses to our song, but the chorus, unrehearsed
Through weeks and months of constant dread, you were always on my mind
Hoping you would see my heart, but still your eyes were blind
One day you walked right next to me, my eyes locked onto you
I thought of all the times we shared, I knew that you did too
As we passed I looked back once, and smiled when I did see
That you were stopped in clear daylight, staring back at me


The author's comments:
We all have that one relationship that leaves us asking "What just happened?" The feelings that were present at the time circled you, haunted you, for days. Funny how in the blink of an eye, everything could change and start over.

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on Jan. 17 2013 at 9:12 pm
seriouslyjustkidding SILVER, Irwin, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore!" - Edgar Allan Poe

Thank you for the comment! And I definitely will! 

on Jan. 17 2013 at 7:50 pm
Padoodallee GOLD, Haven, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw the angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." -Michelangelou

My favorite of your poems so far! You surrounded the meaning of your poem in a great story that leaves me thinking about what happened. I agree with Skyowesmerain. Rhyming and the rythm are natural and don't distract from the actual meaning of the poem. Great Job! it would be really awesome if you could read/rate/comment on a few of my poems =)

on Jan. 17 2013 at 3:48 am
seriouslyjustkidding SILVER, Irwin, Pennsylvania
7 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore!" - Edgar Allan Poe

I appreciate that! Always good to hear feedback on my work! Thanks!

on Jan. 17 2013 at 12:43 am
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
13 articles 1 photo 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.

You are only as strong as your weakest link.

Great job! I especially loved the steady rhythm you kept throughout the poem, and the rhyming as well. Sometimes people manipulate the poem so that it fits the rhyme, but I think you did really really well; it sounded really natural. :) Satisfactory ending too!