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We used to be friends, now where are we?
We would cry together, be shy together,
Now where are we?
The smile vanished from your face
And disappeared without a trace.

Now what we had is gone.
You left me alone
In the darkest of places.
Without a hand to hold.



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Emerson said...
Jan. 16, 2013 at 12:00 pm:
It's really great and relatable. But it did seem to cut off suddenly... Maybe you could beef it up a little or add a little more length. Great work!
 
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EpicOwl said...
Jan. 13, 2013 at 6:08 pm:
I was meant to submit this to the Hot Topics area. I didn't submit, with all the nice comments... what should  I do?
 
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jessica_garbyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 13, 2013 at 3:44 pm:
SO relatable... I'm actually feeling this way right now.
 
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phlogistonThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 13, 2013 at 1:54 pm:
There are so many times when I feel the same way. Great poem.
 
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Annibonny said...
Jan. 13, 2013 at 12:15 am:
this is so relatable! I love it! Nice work!! Keep writing! 
 
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sadesdd said...
Jan. 12, 2013 at 11:19 pm:
This poem is very close to me and my experiences also. I am a fan of poems with a dark side, and this ending is done very well:)
 
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WaffleOcean2934This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 12, 2013 at 1:28 pm:
I really like the ending of the poem.  Nice work on it!  :)
 
EpicOwl replied...
Jan. 12, 2013 at 11:00 pm :
Thanks! Means a lot! I have another poem entitled "Faker". I think you might like it, another big ending! 
 
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