What A Mess, All This Less

January 4, 2013
By JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"You cannot lie to the forest." -Olan Rogers

America once fought oppression and
Later fought itself out of a depression
But now, now all we do is oppress and depress
You're skinny
You're r*******
You're black
You're poor
You're gay
You're fat
You're all less
What a mess
All this less
We should all be a relief to pain
Not mentally beating people with a metaphorical cane
People commit suicide
While our world sits aside
Just raise your voice
It's a simple choice
One comforting word
To one depressed nerd
Can save a life
From the point of a knife
How is America not sick of all this mental strife?
It's sickening
But America keeps on listening
Pretty soon there won't be anyone left for christening
This world will burn
Right now we are at stage churn
Churning burning
Boiling up
Anger will overflow our country's cup
All this hate that's watsup

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JonMB SILVER said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 3:47 pm
JonMB SILVER, Northville, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You cannot lie to the forest." -Olan Rogers

Thank you! Ya it's tough getting people to read your stuff. Thank you for following my stuff though.  

on Apr. 17 2013 at 7:12 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey there! Wow, this poem is probably the most powerful one that I have read on here. I added it to my favorites! Why haven't more people seen this? The set-up was very interesting, I liked it a lot, easy to follow. The first three lines were brilliant where you talk about America fighting oppression and depression. The way you used the harmful phrases people say is very, very powerful. I like how they are all a line their own. The rhymes are good, they ease the mood a bit. I love the line, 'We should all be a relief to pain...' I thought that was wonderful, so true! And the creativity in here is great, 'beating people with a metaphorical cane...' I wish I came up with that, haha! It really mad me very sad to read this line, 'Pretty soon there won't be anyone left for christening...' At the rate the world is going, people won't even care about it if they even know what it is anymore. That's so sad, it's the truth. I love the ending. The last line, omg, PRICELESS. You're an amazing writer and I am very excited to read more of your work. (:


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