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Hey! Time for a story,
But promise me not to be sorry,
As the tale is sad,
But that does not make it bad.

There was once a lad,
Who always seemed sad,
B'cause no friend, he had,
Too much anxiety he had.



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lilredd7 said...
Oct. 19, 2013 at 9:13 am:
I love figuring out a nd using my imagination for writing mainly because I'm a writer my self  
 
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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 24, 2013 at 2:31 pm:
Hmmmm....tbh I'm not one for things that rhyme with the same sound all throughout.....especially when u repeat words.....:) just being honest
 
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SaphiraBrightscales said...
Apr. 21, 2013 at 11:52 am:
I love the intrigue but the repitition of "he had" kind of made my tongue a little uncomfortable as I recited it...but overall a nice piece...
 
Hamzawaseem replied...
Apr. 22, 2013 at 11:12 pm :
thank you :D
 
SaphiraBrightscales replied...
Apr. 24, 2013 at 5:00 am :
You're welcome!
 
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Mackentosh said...
Apr. 20, 2013 at 2:01 pm:
A small child, perhaps neglected or an orphan, lacks a true friend and suffers from anxiety. Interesting... :) Sparks my curiousity!
 
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joejinny said...
Apr. 18, 2013 at 3:34 am:
an incomplete story of lonliness. but wonderful poem
 
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AbbaDabbaDoo said...
Apr. 12, 2013 at 7:46 am:
Pretty and curious. Thank you for writing it. You have a gift!
 
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KayleneB said...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 1:08 pm:
It's wonderful the way you wrote this to have an ambiguous ending
 
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FallenoutofgraceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 1, 2013 at 3:08 pm:
your extremly talented, and amazing keep it up
 
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moet14 said...
Mar. 31, 2013 at 4:39 am:
Your very talented  
 
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Anathema-Equinox said...
Mar. 24, 2013 at 11:54 pm:
I like this poem because it makes you think. It makes you think of what the completed version of this poem would be. But since every person is different, people who read this poem will come up with different endings .
 
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Sabeen_YameenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 19, 2013 at 5:21 am:
You know what....? it's fab! :)
 
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Sparkle1popsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2013 at 11:02 am:
I really like the common theme of this poem. It sticks out strongly. The picture very well acompanies the poem. 
 
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cookiemonster24This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 12, 2013 at 12:51 pm:
I wonder what is it about? But it was rally good. Use of words is very amusing.
 
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Sparkle1popsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 1:24 pm:
I like this, but the last two linee have the same ending and that makes it sound kind of repetitive. 
 
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baileyanne said...
Jan. 15, 2013 at 2:22 pm:
I love how you leave the end up to peoples imagination.. very clever:)
 
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MysticLady said...
Jan. 7, 2013 at 12:07 am:
Nice comment. Anyway i thought this poem reminded me of a friend but it was pretty good so yeah..... thanks again
 
UnicornFart replied...
Jan. 7, 2013 at 6:52 am :
hey mystic its me 4..u promised to email me but u never did..anyway i just quitted on TI and am using my cousin's email to post here... but u know my own email,dont you?   sorry hamzawaseem :P ur poems real good
 
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Hamzawaseem said...
Jan. 7, 2013 at 12:04 am:
:P...............................
 
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