Incomplete Story

December 31, 2012
By Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
15 articles 1 photo 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein


Hey! Time for a story,
But promise me not to be sorry,
As the tale is sad,
But that does not make it bad.

There was once a lad,
Who always seemed sad,
B'cause no friend, he had,
Too much anxiety he had.


The author's comments:
As the title says, it's an incomplete story. It depends on the imagination and thinking of the reader to get a message from the poem.

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lilredd7 said...
on Oct. 19 2013 at 9:13 am
I love figuring out a nd using my imagination for writing mainly because I'm a writer my self  

on Apr. 24 2013 at 2:31 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Hmmmm....tbh I'm not one for things that rhyme with the same sound all throughout.....especially when u repeat words.....:) just being honest

on Apr. 24 2013 at 5:00 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

You're welcome!

on Apr. 22 2013 at 11:12 pm
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
15 articles 1 photo 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein

thank you :D

on Apr. 21 2013 at 11:52 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

I love the intrigue but the repitition of "he had" kind of made my tongue a little uncomfortable as I recited it...but overall a nice piece...

on Apr. 20 2013 at 2:01 pm
Mackentosh BRONZE, Amarillo, Texas
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
You never know how strong you are, until being strong is the only choice you have.

A small child, perhaps neglected or an orphan, lacks a true friend and suffers from anxiety. Interesting... :) Sparks my curiousity!

on Apr. 18 2013 at 3:34 am
joejinny BRONZE, Kerala, Other
1 article 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
credibility is like virginity once you lose it you can never get it back

an incomplete story of lonliness. but wonderful poem

on Apr. 12 2013 at 7:46 am
AbbaDabbaDoo PLATINUM, Mountain Grove, Missouri
43 articles 6 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
Some folks are wise and some are otherwise. I guess we know which one you are.

Pretty and curious. Thank you for writing it. You have a gift!

on Apr. 4 2013 at 1:08 pm
KayleneB BRONZE, Oakfield, New York
2 articles 4 photos 23 comments
It's wonderful the way you wrote this to have an ambiguous ending

on Apr. 1 2013 at 3:08 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

your extremly talented, and amazing keep it up

on Mar. 31 2013 at 4:39 am
iimoeloveii GOLD, Augusta, Georgia
14 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
IF YOU CAN'T HANG THEN THERE'S THE DOOR-SLEEPING WITH SIRENS

Your very talented  

on Mar. 24 2013 at 11:54 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

I like this poem because it makes you think. It makes you think of what the completed version of this poem would be. But since every person is different, people who read this poem will come up with different endings .

on Feb. 19 2013 at 5:21 am
Sabeen_Yameen SILVER, Karachi, Other
9 articles 10 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you want something you have never had,
You have got to do something, You have never done!

You know what....? it's fab! :)

on Feb. 17 2013 at 11:02 am
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
31 articles 20 photos 343 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

I really like the common theme of this poem. It sticks out strongly. The picture very well acompanies the poem. 

on Feb. 12 2013 at 12:51 pm
CookieMonster24 PLATINUM, Delhi, Other
25 articles 2 photos 149 comments
I wonder what is it about? But it was rally good. Use of words is very amusing.

on Feb. 10 2013 at 1:24 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
31 articles 20 photos 343 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

I like this, but the last two linee have the same ending and that makes it sound kind of repetitive. 

on Jan. 15 2013 at 2:22 pm
LyricLove SILVER, Webster City, Iowa
6 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell me the skies the limit when there are foot prints on the moon."

I love how you leave the end up to peoples imagination.. very clever:)

UnicornFart said...
on Jan. 7 2013 at 6:52 am
hey mystic its me 4..u promised to email me but u never did..anyway i just quitted on TI and am using my cousin's email to post here... but u know my own email,dont you?   sorry hamzawaseem :P ur poems real good

MysticLady said...
on Jan. 7 2013 at 12:07 am
MysticLady, Estancia, New Mexico
0 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your limit is what you make it

Nice comment. Anyway i thought this poem reminded me of a friend but it was pretty good so yeah..... thanks again

on Jan. 7 2013 at 12:04 am
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
15 articles 1 photo 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein

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