Faulty Cleaning MAG

August 14, 2008
By christine g., Glendale, CA, Glendale, CA

I had finally gotten you
Out of my head.
I had finally forgotten
Those soulful black eyes
And soft lips.

With chapped hands,
I had stood proud,
Looking over the polished surface
Of my mind.

I had made sure
There was no speck,
No spot,
No clue that you
Were ever
Here
With me
In my paradise.

Blood, sweat, and tears
Cleaned that damned
Floor.

But it looks like
I missed a spot.



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on Oct. 23 2011 at 5:07 pm
HollywoodHotshot BRONZE, West Chester, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"There is a fine line between fishing and standing at the shore like an idiot." -Steven Wright
"Even a genius can run into doors." -anonomys

Wow, i can totaly relate to that! That was reLy amazing i loved the last part.

on Jun. 13 2011 at 5:30 pm
NatChick SILVER, Muskegon, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Not everything that is faced can be changed. But nothing can be changed until it's faced."-James Baldwin

This is really good. I liked how it tod a story:)

on Feb. 23 2011 at 1:28 pm
anonymouse222, CC, Texas
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this is amazing! it caught my attention in the title and first paragraph! and the end! I love it :) "I missed a spot." I relate with this so well...

on Feb. 2 2011 at 5:10 pm
silentvocal SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Don't try to fix what isn't broken

My favorite part is the last paragragh-I love that-i think its just enough to stick in the reader's head. It really gets you at the end-its like this sarcastic weight with the last liine-love it!

on Jan. 10 2011 at 11:12 pm
SKSK1214 BRONZE, Davie, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"And suddenly we see that love costs all we have and will ever be. Yet its only love which sets us free.", & "If we don't believe theres reason for living then we'll never know."

wow that really was something. Last cuplet gave me chills. Definitly have things to think about. Great job. Very relatable and insightful. Do keep writing.

on Oct. 25 2010 at 3:16 pm
emmacxoxo PLATINUM, Chelsea, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Okay. Okay.

this legit could have been written about my life...really good job(: look at some of my stuff if you have a chance

on Sep. 23 2010 at 5:20 pm
KiNABABE SILVER, Lakewood, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"WHATS MEANT T0 BE WiLL ALWAYS FiND iTS WAY"

i love the metaphor in your poem ; it reminds me of a similar situation that i was once in.

on Sep. 1 2010 at 10:11 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

I wish you could've extended that metaphor more... get down to the grit of things, per say, but nice end line... read some of mine?

on May. 30 2010 at 11:08 pm
manda_the_random_poet PLATINUM, Elfrida, Arizona
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amazing job love the poem..keep writing..it is very true for most people

on May. 9 2009 at 3:16 pm
one_of_a_kind_girl GOLD, N/A, California
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this is the kinda stuff i write- LOVE IT!

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on Mar. 17 2009 at 12:50 pm
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
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this is really good:)

on Feb. 23 2009 at 11:37 pm
Very pretty (:

xjustlistenx said...
on Feb. 19 2009 at 10:13 pm
i went through the same thing keep writing ur waesome

on Feb. 15 2009 at 9:37 pm
SoccerGrl517 SILVER, Hillsboro, Missouri
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This is nice..I can relate to it and i like it alot.

Writer4life said...
on Feb. 10 2009 at 7:10 pm
This is so good. kEEP WRITING


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