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I have met perfection
And she lives behind a graceful veil
That covers her so beautifully
But I have always wondered
How she breaths down there

I have walked beside her
And I have watched her smile
With a charm almost inhuman
But when you peer in closely
You'll notice that it cracks

I have heard the way she speaks
Of the rose-paved path that lays ahead
And she swears she's felt the petals
But when her words come to an end
The air tastes so uncertain

I have seen her laughing
And watched her light up many rooms
With just a spark of her bright eyes
But I've also caught a hint of smoke
And I'm afraid that she's on fire

Yes, I have met perfection
And true, I've seen what she can do
But I would not want to be her
Because what some might call desired
I call tragedy



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rachelmuschett This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2013 at 9:50 pm
Love how at the end of the stanza you have a "but". Love this poem and love your choice of words. 5/5! thanks for sharing such a good poem!
 
StarlitSunrise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 14, 2013 at 5:17 pm
Thank you so much! It really means a ton to me that you have taken time to comment on my work. :)
 
Anansesem This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 21, 2013 at 7:23 pm
The way you write here sounds so delicate--and you are so good at personification!--unless this is someone you know or have imagined.
 
SaphiraBrightscalesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2013 at 10:41 am
This was AWESOME! It is such a creative piece plus all the words fit perfectly..I really like the last stanza ...epic!
 
StarlitSunrise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 17, 2013 at 11:56 am
Thank you very much! I appriciate the feedback!
 
SaphiraBrightscalesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 18, 2013 at 11:13 am
You're Welcome!
 
RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 15, 2013 at 8:41 pm
This is one of my faves,definitely:) I think you and I have the same style/voice but you communicate your ideas better. You're like me five years from now:) ... Btw your pictures fits the poem perfectly!
 
StarlitSunrise This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 15, 2013 at 9:58 pm
  Aw, you are so sweet! I can't tell you how much all your comments have meant to me! However, I have read a lot of your stuff, and I certainly do not think that I am any better at communicating my ideas than you are. People are generally their own worst critics. And I’m glad you liked the picture! I noticed that you used it for one of your poems as well. :) (I think you submitted yours before mine, so I guess you win there :P)
 
RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 16, 2013 at 11:22 am
Haha, I guess so.
 
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