I Know Why

December 5, 2012
By kirsten9 GOLD, Washington Courthouse, Ohio
kirsten9 GOLD, Washington Courthouse, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Go for the gold!


I know why the time goes by
Every second, every minute, every hour
I know why the time goes by
Memories reestablished every tick, every tock
Feelings embroidered into every dash
I know why the time goes by
Emotions awakened each centimeter
There is no reliving the past
The hopes of tomorrow keep me going
I know why the time goes by.


The author's comments:
This was written to help me get through the day.

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on Jan. 31 2013 at 6:34 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

I really like this. If anything, you could incorporate your motif of time just a little bit more. Instead of centimeter, for example, you could say "second" or something of the sort. The repetitiveness, in addition, really makes the entire poem feel like a "pick-me-up" poem. I can tell that you wrote to get through the day, and I can certainly feel the emotion radiating off of the letters. Great job.

on Dec. 26 2012 at 10:07 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

I love that! I would, however, suggest changing the part where you said,"Emotions awakened each centimeter". It does noy really go along with the flow of the poem. 

kirsten9 GOLD said...
on Dec. 9 2012 at 6:10 pm
kirsten9 GOLD, Washington Courthouse, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Go for the gold!

thank you for your input! I guess I never considered it, I don't know why I haven't... But thank you! I shall revise.

on Dec. 9 2012 at 2:03 pm
xxtennis13xx SILVER, Clarkston, Michigan
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I like this a lot! As I was reading it, I kept splitting it into short stanzas in my head, with the first line of each being "I know why time goes by". Syntax is powerful, and if you wanted to I'd say start messing around with you line/stanza breaks. It would put a lot of emphasis on each individual point. I'm not trying to offend you, because this is a great poem. It's just a suggestion! :)

kirsten9 GOLD said...
on Dec. 8 2012 at 1:57 pm
kirsten9 GOLD, Washington Courthouse, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go for the gold!

Thank you so much! I appreciate that!

on Dec. 8 2012 at 12:36 pm
KnitsandPurls GOLD, Mahtomedi, Minnesota
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"I cannot live without books"
--Thomas Jefferson

This is a beautiful poem. Mechanically good, it also includes a strong emotional component. Wonderful work.


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