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An Everlasting Moment

Perhaps it was no more than an hour,
Or even less than thirty minutes,
But it seemed to be everlasting.
The memory of the woman
Whose son had been shot
By a man who left no trace.

Her overwhelming emotions
Of sadness, of grief, and of fright,
The image is inerasable.
The bright flashing lights
Of ambulances, of fire trucks, and of police cars
Brings a crashing wave of emotions,
Emotions that cannot be contained.

Perhaps the culprit will be found,
But that is not something that truly concerns me
For I am no longer with the one who cared for me dearly,
The one who I had once been able to call my mother.



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ChobaniLuvinPenguinThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 10, 2012 at 3:34 pm:
I really like the imagery here! It adds suspense and puts you into the scene. Just one thing, "emotions" seems to be repeated too much.
 
Hesper0917 replied...
Dec. 10, 2012 at 4:50 pm :
Thanks! (:
 
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iam4evermyself said...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 7:37 pm:
You show so much potential. It's amazing but Now.. go on and add more details to conclude the story. Sense i can sense the main protagnist wants to get revenage for the killing.
 
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iam4evermyself said...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 5:06 pm:
This is So Go. I love it :)
 
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