Holding Hands

November 12, 2012
By LiveToLove SILVER, Lansing, Michigan
LiveToLove SILVER, Lansing, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Having a rough day? Place your hand over your heart. Feel that? That's called purpose. You're alive for a reason. Don't give up♥


I really want to tell you
Why
But I'm afraid that I might
Cry
Please don't let this moment
Die
But don't let me waste your precious
Time
And let me fall away before I
Lie

We walk on red roses
Now lifeless
We talk of memories
Now hopeless
We wonder what lies ahead
But we can't see

So tell Me
What brings me to my knees
Help
Me stop the bleeding
It's too much
To take but
I can't Let go

Darkness is thick
An inky substance I can touch
Strung in curtains around me as I reach for you
But please, darling
Tell me what I'm reaching for
Because I no longer know why you're even there

I really want to tell you
Why
But I'm afraid that I might
Cry
Please just let this moment
Die
I won't let you waste my precious
Time
I'll let you fall away before you
Lie


The author's comments:
I don't want to say what this one is about...
So guess!
I'm hoping for lots of critique (I haven't written poetry in a LONG time, so I'm rusty, and this was about a 10 minute piece.)
So thanks!
Shout out to Raeee:)

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LunaLives GOLD said...
on Nov. 30 2012 at 10:02 pm
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

Is it about an old friendship that died and you miss or maybe want something more from? I really love it. You're not rusty at all!

on Nov. 25 2012 at 9:27 pm
ForeverDreaming BRONZE, Acme, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I'm not a perfect person, I make a lot of mistakes... but still, I love the people who stay with me after knowing who I really am.~

If God brings you to it then he will bring you through it.

This is a very, very intriquing poem that I enjoyed very much! I really enjoy this style of writing and can't wait to see more poetry from you! :)

KylieK GOLD said...
on Nov. 25 2012 at 8:41 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

"Darkness is a thick, inky substance I can touch, strung in curtains around me as I reach for you.."   Favorite line! I want to write it on a page a million times!   I just... Love it! SO much depth, character, structure, inspired! 

on Nov. 25 2012 at 7:11 pm
samasparagus SILVER, Riverside, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"'Good. Illegal is always faster.'"
-Eoin Colfer

This is really interesting. I really love the repitition and the emotion throughout :)

Jax_was_here said...
on Nov. 25 2012 at 6:28 pm
Jax_was_here, Dayton, Ohio
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"they say that love is forever, your forever is all that i need" ~sleeping with sirens

i love it. bloody good poem if i should say so. (:


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