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Not as Strong as You Think

Fragile fingers
Fragile bones
Fragile memories
shattered by stones
Shards of glass
in the air
Fragile words
said by those who don't care
Fragile hope
Fragile dreams
Fragile relationships
that aren't as they seem
Fragile laughs
Fragile smiles
That all add up to a
fragile child



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RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 2, 2013 at 5:04 pm:
I think that you overused the word "fragile" even though it was purposeful. It wasn't as effective as you think. ... Sorry if this seems rude, I'm just trying to help:)
 
wanderlustfulThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 3, 2013 at 1:45 am :
The whole focus of the poem was on fragility. The "overuse" of the word fragile was purposeful andntoncreate an emphasis on the fact that broken promises and empty words can end up creating a broken, empty, "fragile" person. But thank you for your critique!!
 
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