The Promise

September 21, 2012
By deepoceanblue PLATINUM, Syracuse, Utah
deepoceanblue PLATINUM, Syracuse, Utah
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I made a promise, that I said forever I'd keep
But now I stay up crying in the night losing my sleep.
I promised to stay away, I promised to leave
And now the questions come, and through my mind they do weave.
Tears come to my eyes as I remember the things we've been through,
And the last thing that I thought I would lose was you.
You come to me looking for words of comfort
But as you leave you see that we both are hurt.
I feel your pain as I struggle to walk on by
All I want is to hold you and tell you "don't you cry."
From the first day I saw you, right from the start.
I never thought that someday I might break your heart.
You look up at the sky, wondering if you will see
The holder of your heart, the hero I can be.
So I try to move on, and take another leap,
But I realize something.
The best promises are ones you can't keep.

The author's comments:
Based on the ending of the new Spiderman movie.

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bagley777 GOLD said...
on Oct. 18 2012 at 7:33 pm
bagley777 GOLD, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
Love is a two way street. If you find yourself on a one-way road, it's time to take the next turn off.

Another really well written poem. It's a little depressing, but that just means that you captured the emotions really well(:

on Sep. 27 2012 at 5:05 pm
deepoceanblue PLATINUM, Syracuse, Utah
27 articles 0 photos 27 comments
Thanks a ton :)

Honour SILVER said...
on Sep. 27 2012 at 2:50 pm
Honour SILVER, New London, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Greater love has no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends. ~John 15:13

"Give me liberty or give me death!" ~Patrick Henry

Be brave and steadfast; have no fear or dread of them, for it is the Lord, your God, who marches with you; he will never fail you or forsake you. ~ Deuteronomy 31:6

"I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery" ~ Thomas Jefferson

This is well written, though it sounds like a very depressing end to a movie.  :P

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