When I die

September 15, 2012
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When I die

Will hope die with me?

The hope for individuality

The hope for kids to see a field

With tree after tree after tree

The hope to live life differently

From everybody else

The hope that we'll be confident

From deep inside our selves

Where unique would be encouraged

And strange and weird not even words

A creativity that flourished

For dreams to fly, yes just like birds

Or would we all be broken

Just like some of us are now

Cruel and unforgiving

A sneer that surely

stirs up growls

Now surely you agree

A life like that just isn't right

That every one should live

Always reaching for the light

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WonTonFred1 said...
Oct. 7, 2012 at 11:34 pm
liked it but I don't know I don't think the world is doomed and I don't think you do either, try to add a little hope in their lol loved it otherwise good ryhmes :D  
anasorochi replied...
Oct. 7, 2012 at 11:59 pm
Thanks! I guess I meant my poem as a warning...of what could be(?). I don't know. Thanks for your comment!
WonTonFred1 replied...
Oct. 8, 2012 at 11:47 pm
np good story :D  
ToxicAngel This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 19, 2012 at 3:34 am
Awesome job. :) No complaints. I really admire how the story unfolded and the rhyme scheme flowed so nicely. You painted a really inspiring picture as well. Overall, it's great.
anasorochi replied...
Oct. 7, 2012 at 11:56 am
Thanks!! I really appreciate it!
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