A lad in blue jeans

, Sialkot, Pakistan

Stares,

a lad in faded blue jeans,

at a shoe store,

glowing with flourescent lights.

Wonders,

if he could get one too?

Enchanted,

at the prospect,

he rushes home,

his walking sticks,

tic-tac-ing all the way!

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jetta.bug said...
Nov. 28, 2012 at 6:50 pm:

Interesting. Short and sweet. Very unique. I don't really understand what's going on, but in poetry, the reader's supposed to interpret that themselves. That makes it hard to judge on clarity. You did a good job, though!

VelaneDeBeaute replied...
Nov. 29, 2012 at 2:37 pm :

The main idea that was lying behind was the perception of a poor handicapped boy, and since had no legs, he never had worn any shoes. And then he sees a shoe store and gets too excited to purchase the beauties, keeping his unfortunate behind. :)
Thank you so much for reviewing. It helps to know that the reader read to the very last word. Ty! :D