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Uprising After Fifty-one Days

Book: poem
Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Brown eyes that belongs to I,
catches you from afar.

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
And I've realized the bridge wasn't set aflame... at least for me.
Drawn by your closeness,
My feet and legs take over, walking me towards you.
Words form; sound echoes, bouncing to you from me.
"hello"
My senses are given back to me.
I regain control of myself, so I scurry back to my abode.
COWARD I am!

Heart pounding, from tying not to faint.
Hands shaking, from the nervousness you gave me.
Head hurting, from tying to figure out who or what made today be the day I would see you again:
Fate?
God?
Destiny?
The devil?

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Unknown miles apart.
Feelings I suppressed now submerged releasing these symptoms I wanted no more!

Please, come in; come closer and decrease the amount of inches of how far apart we are.
This will absolutely help me deal with your uprising.
I want to cry right now.
Tears from finally seeing you but also tears from being tongued tied.

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Noticing differences that hurts my heart.

Gone fifty-one days; away from me.
Abracadabra! You appear.
But two minutes can't make up for fifty-one days.

I don't want to cry right now.
I want to punch the white wall behind me and shout your name, for you to come back and not increase the unknown miles...
because I might not see you again.



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Jessie M. said...
Apr. 12, 2013 at 9:50 pm:
Wow, this is incredible and your structure makes it even better!
 
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awesomelyme said...
Oct. 16, 2012 at 7:05 pm:
Please please please get in contact with me, i need to speak with yu.
 
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EMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 19, 2012 at 9:30 pm:
Wow, I'm speechless. It was absolutely incredible. Now you're making me cry. It is so good and I relate to every single line. Seriously... I'm speechless.
 
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Mr.DedicatedDetermination said...
Sept. 2, 2012 at 7:37 pm:
Beautiful :') Haha, great job
 
Silver-wingedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Sept. 3, 2012 at 1:26 pm :
Thank you for the comment :-)
 
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Padoodallee said...
Sept. 2, 2012 at 7:36 pm:
I love they way you chop up the sentences. It makes me read them more carefully and pay attention to every word.
 
Silver-wingedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Sept. 3, 2012 at 1:25 pm :
Thank you for being captivated by my poem about :-)
 
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