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July 29, 2012
By lillian.black BRONZE, Dunedin, Other
lillian.black BRONZE, Dunedin, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't let it end like this. Tell them I said something."- The dying words of Pacho Villa


i have on an astronaut suit
but not even I can see it
i’m closed up
shrunk into my me-box

i suck my stomach in
a flock of gulls is migrating between
us
there is fright in their wings

the salt and pepper people hug each other
but they have no faces

and someone is pouring a jug half-
full with water, it goes in loud
and ghost
in cold light
and we keep drink-
ing till we’re all water and skin
like lettuce

there’s a pool on the table
it’s eating your sleeve

I try to say it but the saying’s all clung to the roof
of my mouth and now
there’s an ocean on the table


The author's comments:
This is a piece about failure to communicate. I was inspired by my personal experience with asperger syndrome.

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on Aug. 1 2012 at 5:28 pm
albinotiger GOLD, Gloucester, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win"- Stephen King
“In life, unlike chess, the game continues after checkmate”- Isaac Asimov

this is Great!! i love the imagry and the emotion :) !! (maybe check out my work sometime)

on Aug. 1 2012 at 5:13 pm
albinotiger GOLD, Gloucester, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win"- Stephen King
“In life, unlike chess, the game continues after checkmate”- Isaac Asimov

really great work, a lot of imagery and a lot of emotions!! :) (maybe check out my work sometime)

on Jul. 31 2012 at 5:39 pm
booksmangos BRONZE, Bloomsburg, Pennsylvania
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I really like this poem, and the different images you have put into it.  I think they're unique, and giving life to the salt and pepper somehow shows the ( I think ) the sort of loneliness the person is feeling.  I especially like the lettuce image :) Sincerely, I think this is good writing.