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The Day That I Starred In The Play

July 23, 2012
By realbeautifulheart PLATINUM, Livermore, California
realbeautifulheart PLATINUM, Livermore, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is a package that you have to sign for. Yes, it's free. No, there's no guarantee as to what it holds. Open with caution, it's 'FRAGILE'." (I made this up.)


The day that I starred in the play
Was busy and unnerving
I hurried backstage with my costar, Paige
To join the other undeserving
We chatted excitedly about the show
Before going through makeup and hair
Then ran through the lines that we should know
Got into costume and stepped outside to get air
My mother, you should know, was very excited
To hear that I’d gotten a part
She invited the whole family and half of the town
Convinced that this show was a work of art
Upon returning backstage
I exchanged Good lucks with Paige
And we both prepared for the worst
“Just like we rehearsed,” said Mrs. Hearst
And up the curtain flew
I looked out into the audience
And spotted dreadfully reliable Aunt Sue
Surely enough, seated next to her, was also Cousin Drew
You should have seen their faces when I forgot my lines in scene two


The author's comments:
This was just a fun little piece that I wrote while thinking about the theater. I had a similar experience to the one in this poem and so it was my inspiration.

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on Sep. 4 2012 at 9:15 am
realbeautifulheart PLATINUM, Livermore, California
21 articles 1 photo 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is a package that you have to sign for. Yes, it's free. No, there's no guarantee as to what it holds. Open with caution, it's 'FRAGILE'." (I made this up.)

Yep, it really is a bunch of random thoughts. Thanks for the input!

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on Sep. 4 2012 at 4:11 am
Dynamo DIAMOND, Lahore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I used to think falling in love would be personal. But it's all a big public show.

Random thoughts, I'd say. This poem isn't exactly the greatest work of art(to be realistic), but still it has some elements that most great works lack. For instance,it has the power to evoke feelings(pathos), it quintessentially is humorous, and it is reflective and true. Don't ask me how its reflective, but I think it shows that what actually happens is often portrayed as a part of the scene(in live shows) to prevent embarrasment. Other than that, it's good. What's more to say? 

on Aug. 23 2012 at 7:29 am
KnitsandPurls GOLD, Mahtomedi, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"I cannot live without books"
--Thomas Jefferson

Yeah, I get what you mean. I recently was approved a silly rhyming poem called "Ode to Dr. Seuss". Same deal. :)

on Aug. 20 2012 at 6:16 pm
realbeautifulheart PLATINUM, Livermore, California
21 articles 1 photo 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is a package that you have to sign for. Yes, it's free. No, there's no guarantee as to what it holds. Open with caution, it's 'FRAGILE'." (I made this up.)

Thanks :) I understand what you mean, but this poem wasn't one of my serious works. Other pieces I would've edited more, but this one was just kind of fun and I wanted people to get it without over-analyzing. Ya know? I'll be sure to check your stuff out. Have a great day!

on Aug. 19 2012 at 2:16 pm
KnitsandPurls GOLD, Mahtomedi, Minnesota
13 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I cannot live without books"
--Thomas Jefferson

Cute idea and you got your point across. However, (I hate howevers when people give them to me) you had some faulty phrasing, and I think an inconsistent rhyming pattern. You need to self-edit a bit more, make this wonderful poem a bit more, well, polished. Cheers! P.S-- If you want to critique some of my stuff like I just did to you, you can look at "Old Friends", "Lake Superior Shore" "She is a Dancer", or "Snowballs and the New Year". I will love you forever if you do!!!

on Aug. 19 2012 at 10:40 am
realbeautifulheart PLATINUM, Livermore, California
21 articles 1 photo 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is a package that you have to sign for. Yes, it's free. No, there's no guarantee as to what it holds. Open with caution, it's 'FRAGILE'." (I made this up.)

Exactly! And, thanks. :)

on Aug. 18 2012 at 3:36 pm
Ga-GahKayMarie GOLD, Patterson, California
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Favorite Quote:
If there is one word to describe life it is one

This to me is adorable and sweet, how a parent will say to everyone how amazing and how good their child is :) you can be horrible and the worse but they will still tell you your the best :) I really liked this poem, only comment would be to add some more punctuation, though in poetry I dont think there are rights and wrongs. Therefore it is fine just the way it is!