Anger why do you take over my body so? Why do you rush my veins and take all sense with it? Why do you make me scream out in frustration?! I am so sick of you! I need to change! Cause I can't change what's making me feel this may...
sumer44Wow I love this poem. I like that's it's short and to the point. And I feel the emotion.
TraceS.
The short, poignant style used is here is superb. I almost don't want to see a lengthier version of this because it's actually quite powerful on its own. It's shortness is its strength, in my opinion.
;D Like I said I use as few words as possible... I don't really have the attention span to write anything longer lol :D
DanielMGreat poem. I really feel the tension in this poem. I like your last line. Awesome job!!!!suggestion: see if you can add more imagery
ya i've been thinking about re-writing this poem but i was mad when i wrote this and its what i came up with....
caitiekatei like the structure because it makes you read it quickly and you can feel the anger rising with the words. if you added more imagery and builded up the anger more...i think it would help this poem to be more intense (:
ya I was angry when I wrote this... I just wanted to write something to release my emotions :D
Proud_To_Be_An_AmericanI also like how it's structured, because like catie said you read it quickly and actually feel the emotion you're portraying, plus it's easy for me to understand. Yay!! A poem i don't have to read multiple time to get!! :D
i tend to write the ones that make you think....hahaha
Ballerina101
TriumphNo worries, be happy. When I read this in my mind I heard an angry voice aha :P
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