Life&Love

Life is hard
Love is harder
Time is slow
People are slower
Days pass us by
Soon a year is to come

A heart is like a violin
If you're gentle
It plays
however, if you're harsh
It breaks...





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mb777 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 24, 2013 at 1:18 pm
I like how you incorporated a simile to get your message across!
 
kseager2 said...
Aug. 25, 2012 at 5:28 pm
I really like how you can get such a strong message across using so few words. This is really good. :)
 
reasonsiwillneverknow said...
Aug. 25, 2012 at 5:27 pm
I really enjoyed the simplicity of this poem. I personally thought it was a bit short and maybe you could have found a way to make it more deep. However i really liked it and thought it was quite beautiful.
 
Mr.DedicatedDetermination said...
Aug. 25, 2012 at 5:27 pm
Really Well Written. Liked the comparison of a heart to a violin, very fitting. Good job.
 
MadelynHope said...
Aug. 25, 2012 at 5:26 pm
Well written.
 
StayClassy1 said...
Jul. 28, 2012 at 2:18 am
AMAZING ;D
 
DanielM said...
Jul. 28, 2012 at 2:16 am
Great poem.
 
compassion said...
Jul. 27, 2012 at 9:23 am
Totally love the way you compared heart with violin.Though short it is magnificient!!
 
walternash3 said...
Jul. 17, 2012 at 7:11 pm
oh i will, dont you worry about that xD
 
albinotiger said...
Jul. 17, 2012 at 7:08 pm
Aww thats so cute and true!! Like the violin metaphor!
 
EatSleepWrite95 said...
Jul. 17, 2012 at 6:36 pm
Wow, very short but very powerful! Love the comparisons!
 
hippiechick99 said...
Jul. 14, 2012 at 9:33 am
This is a really great poem... I love your comparison of a heart to a violin. In my opinion it could've been longer XD but maybe I just like reading your work. I don't know. Hope you keep writing :3
 
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