I will Smile

June 17, 2012
By dragongirl GOLD, Woodbridge,, Virginia
dragongirl GOLD, Woodbridge,, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
No matter what happens to us know that I will always be there for you. Remember who you are as a person and no one can take that away from you.


When the day come that all the stories of old come true is the day I will smile. When the day come that the earth is at peace with itself is the day I will smile. When the day come that men will not fight each other is the day I will smile. When the day come that everyone will love each other like brothers and sisters is the day I will smile. When the day come that the pain stop is the day I will smile. When the day come that we can finally rest is the day I will smile.
The day is near I can feel in my heart



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HazelGrace said...
on Jun. 16 2013 at 3:48 pm
Again, the effect of repetition lessens the more you use it. And maybe to switch it up you could say after saying " the day i will smile' you could be like "The day I will let radiance spread across my feautures." For such a good topic, your language could be more poetic. Also use linebreaks more effectively and intentionally :)


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