Using Words MAG

June 25, 2012
By AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln


She and I chat. Lightly.
The sentences are fluffed
like cotton-candy clouds;
they are
what we want to hear.
The conversation floats over our heads,
and words
slide from our mouths.

Then, she
opens her mouth too wide
and words
spill
out, the wrong ones.
Her eyes don't change as
the flying words sink
as if they were tied to
boulders.

She picks up a napkin to wipe off the
last phrase
that has begun to dribble down her chin.
She plucks the last
poison-words
from her lips.

“No offense.”


The author's comments:
Don't put people down. It doesn't make you better. Feel free to comment!

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AriShine GOLD said...
on Dec. 25 2012 at 9:33 pm
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

Thank you so much for your positive feedback; it means a lot!

AriShine GOLD said...
on Dec. 15 2012 at 11:33 am
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

I'm so happy you enjoyed this! Thank you!

Kat1712 GOLD said...
on Dec. 14 2012 at 10:33 pm
Kat1712 GOLD, Rockwall, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Inspiration is something that starts with someone else's story, ends with your own, and has a blurry line in between.

I absolutley LOVE the use of cacophony in this poem. You are a fantastic writer, and I know this moment all too well. Thank you for putting it into words.

AriShine GOLD said...
on Dec. 1 2012 at 9:08 am
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

Thanks for the feedback, it means a lot! I'm happy you enjoyed my piece :)

on Nov. 30 2012 at 10:50 pm
StephanieRoro SILVER, Buhl, Idaho
9 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Call no man foe, but never love a stranger." -Stella Benson

I really like this. I loved your use of imagery. The last line is really powerful, because I think we have all heard that one before, am I right? 
"No offense" yeah right. 
I also liked the way you said, "She picks up a napkin to wipe off the last phrase that has begun to dribble down her chin." That's really great. Really. Thanks for sharing. =)

O. said...
on Oct. 1 2012 at 7:36 pm
You capture the truth so beautifully. I really like the last stanza and the imagery you used there. Keep it up, and keep writing. :)

AriShine GOLD said...
on Sep. 6 2012 at 5:28 pm
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

Thank you so much! Your feedback is greatly appreciated.  

InkWriter13 said...
on Jul. 2 2012 at 1:55 pm
Astounding work on this. You have a way with words, most definitely! Wow. :) 5 stars


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