June 20, 2012
By rrruthie BRONZE, New Orleans, Louisiana
rrruthie BRONZE, New Orleans, Louisiana
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I hear the freedom in your voice,
strong as the veins pushing blood through your body –
you are explosive. I think, uncontainable
but the sun tries to pack you into your body,
bind you with light that tans your skin,
tautens your flesh,
but inside, you push back, beat at the walls of your body,
escape only in your smile.

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on Jun. 19 2013 at 7:45 am
Sarah_Oso SILVER, Peachtree City, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Live not for the-end-of-the-song. Live in the along.
(G. Brooks)

Nice! What a way to describe someone's smile -- the sun's sole escape from the body. Wow. Keep writing :)

InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 3:26 pm
Oops, I forgot. Could you explain the title to me? That was the only thing I didn't understand.... :)

InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 3:25 pm
Wonderful poem! Absolutely astounding use of words and imagery. Definitely well-written by a talented writer. I love how I could feel exactly the freedom, the strain of being trapped in a human body, the hiding behind a smile. I love the clarity of thought and mind. GREAT work. Loved it. 5 stars. Perfect length, perfect idea, perfect message. Would you please comment on two of my poems (you can choose)?


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