Silent?

May 31, 2012
By Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
A simple story can tell an entire story!~~ ME
Pictures tell a 1000 words~IDK :P


2:13 AM,
In my room alone.
My house is silent.
The only sounds I hear is the creeks of this old house.
The rustling of the pet bunny in his cage.
The sound of my dad coughing in his sleep across the hall.
The branch to the oak tree outside my window rubbing on the metal roof.
The soft whispers of the wind.
The ticking of my clock.
The buzzing of a fly roaming my room.
The sound of me breathing ever so quietly.
2:17 AM, So I guess it's not really silent is it?


The author's comments:
I was up late alone in my room and this is what I came up with!

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on Jun. 17 2012 at 11:54 am
Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
36 articles 5 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
A simple story can tell an entire story!~~ ME
Pictures tell a 1000 words~IDK :P

Thank you dear friend! And I shall go check out some of your work!

on Jun. 17 2012 at 11:54 am
Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
36 articles 5 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
A simple story can tell an entire story!~~ ME
Pictures tell a 1000 words~IDK :P

Thanks so much! What would you do differently to the last line then? :) I would love to know! Thanks again!

on Jun. 17 2012 at 11:53 am
Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
36 articles 5 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
A simple story can tell an entire story!~~ ME
Pictures tell a 1000 words~IDK :P

Thank you so much! It's crazy how I just randomly wrote this and did not expect anyone to actually like it but yall do! :) And yes it is an old wooden house and no my dad has asthma hes always coughing :)But thanks again really appreciate it!

on Jun. 7 2012 at 2:14 pm
Nicole67 PLATINUM, Indianola, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Someday, someone will walk into your life and make you realize why it never worked out with anyone else."
"we often put up walls not to keep people out, but to see who cares to get through"
“Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind.”

I love how you explained silence as being not so silent. Great job. please check out some of my work. :D

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on Jun. 7 2012 at 3:40 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey!

amazing imagery :D i could picture every single thing....if there is one thing that i could change , it would be the last line...but apart from that :great work and keep writing :D


on Jun. 6 2012 at 9:18 pm
subliminal96 GOLD, Kent, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I have no nation to fight for... my country is the earth and I am a citizen of the world."

Love how this poem explores what silence really is. Excellent imagery- I could almost smell the wood of the old house (for some reason, I assumed there was wood in the house). Totally leaves room for spin-off writing too- as in is there a reason Dad is coughing? Is he sick? Sounds like an element of a new poem or a story to me :)!

on Jun. 4 2012 at 9:15 pm
Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
36 articles 5 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
A simple story can tell an entire story!~~ ME
Pictures tell a 1000 words~IDK :P

Thanks! This was just a random peice I wrote while attempting to fall asleep haha :)

on Jun. 4 2012 at 7:53 pm
Jordan Criswell BRONZE, West Sacramento, California
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Oh thats hecka cool! Ive never thought of silence in that way before. Very creative!


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