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To be Lost in Your Own Mind

Deep in thought;
Despair, wonder and illusions,
Eyes swimming out of focus,
Mind forming a concrete wall
Between dream and consciousness.

Hearing whispers of different voices
Singing eerie melodies,
Forced to hear their judgments
Of your imperfections,
Their cruel beliefs
And profound statements.

Shallow murmurs ring through your awareness:
"Not good enough"
"Not pretty enough"
"Not smart enough"
Another chimes in:
"Too fat"
"Too loud"
"Too fake"

Navigating through the torments,
The terrors,
The tortures of yourself.

What a beautifully tragic thing,
To be lost in your own mind.



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so_joyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 15, 2012 at 8:11 pm:
Extremely interesting! I absolutely love this concept. Please read,rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!
 
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hopelessromantic11 said...
May 30, 2012 at 6:02 pm:

this is a really great poem i can totally relate to the voice cause people call me names all the time

 

 
crushed_veneer replied...
May 30, 2012 at 8:29 pm :
I'm sorry:( same with me, it's tough. thank you though:)
 
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KestrelThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 30, 2012 at 2:45 pm:
Great concept. Good job; My favorite line is the "what a beautifully tragic thing" it's an interesting idea. something beautifully tragic. makes you think if something could be tragically beautiful, no? I think yes. 
 
crushed_veneer replied...
May 30, 2012 at 5:55 pm :
Haha thanks so much :) 
 
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. said...
May 30, 2012 at 12:08 pm:

that was actually pretty good!

 

 
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DanielM said...
May 30, 2012 at 11:37 am:
Wow...that was really good. Great Job!!! Keep it up. only suggestions is expanded more when you were talking about the "shallow murmurs part" expanded more on those quotes. other that it was awesome!!!
 
mindless_dreaming replied...
May 30, 2012 at 12:00 pm :
Thanks :) I'll keep it in mind!
 
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DanielM said...
May 30, 2012 at 11:37 am:
Wow...that was really good. Great Job!!! Keep it up. only suggestions is expanded more when you were talking about the "shallow murmurs part" expanded more on those quotes. other that it was awesome!!!
 
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earthhashope said...
May 30, 2012 at 9:27 am:
Really gud!!! :) :)
 
mindless_dreaming replied...
May 30, 2012 at 11:29 am :
Thank you so much!:)
 
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Detrop_dream said...
May 30, 2012 at 9:25 am:

You are a poet...

 

 
mindless_dreaming replied...
May 30, 2012 at 11:29 am :
Aww, haha hardly, but thank you:)
 
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