You Are....

May 22, 2012
You are like a ruby red rose
Beautiful, but with thorns
Waiting for the right girl
to come along and pick you

You are like a open book,
Your secrets lie there
Out and in front for all to see Exposing you like you'll never know

You are like a baseball fan
Full of hope and determination
Even at the sight of defeat
Always ready for whatever comes your way

You are like only you
The one I care for the most
Always friendly to anyone you meet
You are like perfection

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InkWriter13 said...
Jun. 25, 2012 at 10:41 pm
A beautiful poem. Very sweet. Well-written, great clarity. The picture you chose works great with this poem as well. I like the comparisons, and the ending is perfect. Lovely work. Relatable. Hope he finally sees you for who you are. :) Would you please comment on my poem titled the Warmth of Life and On A Chilly Night?
Caleb.Andrews said...
Jun. 24, 2012 at 8:56 pm
Great poem! Like the poem that Apollo77 posted in the forum, there is good emotion and energy embedded in the writing. Good job!
Apollo77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 24, 2012 at 7:48 pm
I like the structure a lot, and your description is just right... I love the ending
bigblue said...
Jun. 24, 2012 at 5:29 pm

This is a fantastic poem. Great job with structure, good theme, and I loved the ending. If you could read some of my work and comment I would greatly appreciate it :)


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