Secrets

May 19, 2012
By Untouchable-Summer SILVER, Cranford, New Jersey
Untouchable-Summer SILVER, Cranford, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Even the best fall down sometimes


With a heart of gold
and eyes that searched deep beyond the surface
she touched your mind without making a sound
and she spoke words that would melt in your hands
and sang melodies that would dance in your soul
and you wished you could somehow return the magic
but as fast as she came, she always went
back to the place only she knew
the place you would never guess
so it hit you heavily
more than you anticipated
when she never came back
and only then did you recall the times that
her smile didn’t quite reach her eyes.


The author's comments:
Feedback is appreciated, thanks so much for reading

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on Feb. 25 2013 at 8:02 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

I. Love. This. Don’t get me wrong, I enjoyed it all the way through, but it was really the last line that got me. I mean, wow. Your descriptions are very powerful, and your writing has a very natural flow to it. Plus, I love love love that you managed to say something totally unexpected with this. Great work! 

on Sep. 17 2012 at 3:48 pm
Untouchable-Summer SILVER, Cranford, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Even the best fall down sometimes

Aw thank you :)

on Aug. 23 2012 at 10:41 pm
Mashley310 BRONZE, Rowlett, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"They always forget the last part of that saying: curiosity killed the cat but satisfaction brought it back" its something to that effect anyway." - Tamora Pierce

I really enjoyed reading this! I especially enjoyed some of the figurative language at the beginning, specifically the idea of words melting in your hands. :-)

on Jul. 6 2012 at 3:21 pm
ignorance_is_bliss PLATINUM, Memphis, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"This is what it is, this is who I am
This is where I finally take my stand
I didn't wanna fall but I about to crawl
I met the one with two scarred hands"

-Newsboys, Born Again

wow, this is really great. im glad i read this, it was really great! keep writing always!

forever and always, Alexis Mccown


on Jul. 5 2012 at 8:59 pm
Untouchable-Summer SILVER, Cranford, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Even the best fall down sometimes

Thanks so much! & I want to leave it open for interpretation, but I was thinking of someone who struggled with depression but no one could tell from the outside. 

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on May. 28 2012 at 7:44 pm
Shmelmo GOLD, Elma, Iowa
16 articles 9 photos 143 comments

Favorite Quote:
You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.

This was really cool. My favorite was the ending - only then did you recall the times that her smile didn't quite reach her eyes. What was your story behind it? 


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