Moment This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

July 27, 2008
the hands of the clock were her merry-go-round
and she rides the gray horse
around, round, round
each dizzy whirl a year
a millennium
an eternity

it spins round, round
never stopping
never seeing
the girl with the revised smile
and the scratched-out heart

in just a moment
she will return to her world
the chapter of change predestined
her novel written for her

in just a moment
it will happen
a slammed door
a plane lifting in flight
a world shattered

in just a moment
she will kiss his whispered promises
i’m here
i’m always here
and brush his hand
and will say those words

in just a moment
she will read his eyes
like the pages of her books
and will write his story around hers
in just a moment

the hands of the clock move on
and she stays on her gray horse
broken smile, broken heart
the moment; lost

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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BlurredReflection said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 11:11 pm
I teared up reading this. This is phenomonaly beautiful...
kalim said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 7:35 pm
Goodjobbob said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 11:45 am
I can definately realte! great jobbob!
casielynnxoxo said...
Nov. 14, 2010 at 9:06 pm

I absolutely love the part when it refers to kisssing his whispered promises. It's amazing. And so true, it takes a real poet to take such a simple action, and bring it to life.

Amazing. :)

Baller22 said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 7:05 pm
check out my poems! please!
UrAnGelBabY said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 4:15 pm
I feel the same. reading this made my heart pound and my mind scream. i love it so i tagged =D
romance_lover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 9:05 pm
I can relate to this so much it made me cry. You are amazing. Never stop writing....
nxexnxaxj said...
Apr. 23, 2009 at 12:49 am
dis is soo good! 1 of ma faves
jazzy828 said...
Apr. 22, 2009 at 1:11 am
i didnt really get the poem probably because im just a kid. cna some1 explain it to me?
Mena<3 said...
Apr. 3, 2009 at 1:27 pm
you put so much emotion into this;
which you cut right to the point

i hate when people rhyme because sometimes they dont have a chance to get eveerything they want to say in.
and therfore the poem turns out different then they even wanted.

which yours is amazing so i dont think you'll have to ever worry about that!

good job=]
writerreader said...
Feb. 10, 2009 at 12:20 am
this poem was amazing, if you dont read closely you miss how good it is, it gave me emotions i could relate too,thank you for writing this, and be sure ill read it again
sup 01 said...
Jan. 3, 2009 at 6:52 pm
realy well written i liked because i hate it when people feel they must rym for it to be a poem when raely it gets more emotion across if you dont
xorachelmarieexo said...
Jan. 3, 2009 at 5:21 am
ohmigosh! its so good keep on wirting!
leahleahloves said...
Dec. 26, 2008 at 6:37 pm
I loved this. Very inspirational; it got me thinking, gave me a view ideas.
crich97 said...
Dec. 19, 2008 at 2:20 am
Whoa. Just like a merry-go-round, that gave me motion sickness. I feel like the speed and the rhythem of the poem were very, well, varied. It was hard to follow. I like the idea a lot... and maybe I'm just reading it wrong. I have read it several times... just can't seem to find the right spot. Hmm...
tweedle dee said...
Dec. 30, 2008 at 2:02 am
i liked it alright, could have used a little work but worth reading!
unknown said...
Dec. 12, 2008 at 8:00 pm
"the hands of the clock were her merry-go-round
and she rides the gray horse"

you wrote "were" which is past tense but then "rides" which is present tense

bugs me
sexygurl101 said...
Dec. 12, 2008 at 4:54 pm
I love this poem. It was so beautiful i bet anyone who reads this would love it, just as much as i did.
swinginme! said...
Dec. 11, 2008 at 4:59 am
this was absolutely beautiful!!!

you have talent!!! omg i love this poem so so so much! gave me chills!

i wish i knew you so we could discuss writing style. cuz you are awesome!!
sleepnix said...
Dec. 5, 2008 at 12:26 pm
Excellent! Very nice usage of repetition. Enough, but not too much.
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