Liar MAG

July 22, 2008
By Alison Green, Kensington, CA

in your mouth
you fold your paper-thin words up
like origami and grin when they take flight
as paper cranes
hope swelling in the beating of their fragile wings
filling the spaces between us
and bursting in front of my eyes
leaving
drops of happiness trickling down
forming puddles by my feet.



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on Jun. 5 2013 at 5:55 pm
bookmouse BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
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k8husted, part of the point of commments is to give critique in a kind manner. thewriter19 was not trying to tear down the author with criticism, but rather trying to give the author constructive criticism. thewriter19 also liked the poem (shecomplemented the symbols). I think you should think twice before you accuse anyone of "critisiz[ing]." Constructive criticism is the act of telling someone how you think they should improve and writer19 was doing just that. Consturcutcive criticism is not a bad thing, in fact it is a way to constructively use an opinion to show someone something that may (in the giver of the constructive criticisms) mind imrpove the writing. 

on Sep. 13 2012 at 11:04 am
k8husted PLATINUM, Central Point, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Bliss Cavendar:(Whip it 2009) The last time I wore skates, they had
Barbies on them.

Shut up its her poem! Why get on here and critize or tell her things she should be doing? The beauty of poetry is that its yours, in your own way. Loved the poem.

on May. 26 2012 at 9:15 am
thewriter19 BRONZE, Coral Springs, Florida
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Very good symbols. to this piece. I like the organization of the words. But the beggining to this one could be more strongly stated and comas are needed to make this piece a masterpiece

But one more thing really bothers me...Why is the name of this piece Liar. I feel like the emotion being expressed is more of a lonly feeling to it. I could not point out any symbols that connected Liar to the paper crane. I feel like this is describing something else other then being a "liar"


on May. 26 2012 at 6:05 am
RaviTeja SILVER, Chelmsford, Massachusetts
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Wow that was very beautiful and elegant, yet very powerful!!!!! Very nice...

on May. 26 2012 at 6:05 am
RaviTeja SILVER, Chelmsford, Massachusetts
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Wow that was very beautiful and elegant, yet very powerful!!!!! Very nice...

on May. 26 2012 at 6:05 am
RaviTeja SILVER, Chelmsford, Massachusetts
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Wow that was very beautiful and elegant, yet very powerful!!!!! Very nice...

on Apr. 12 2012 at 10:58 am
Kitkat2013 SILVER, Shelbyville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
who you would seem to be, be really

wow that was amazing:) its good to know that im not the only one who has felt the disgusting sting of lies...

Annoymous said...
on Feb. 28 2012 at 9:39 am
Annoymous, Arlignton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Respect yourself
and others will respect you

this was a great poem although i didnt know what it meant

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:38 pm
bmoney22 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
why dont you get away from me donkey!!!!!

hi linda ! :)

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:36 pm
bmoney22 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
why dont you get away from me donkey!!!!!

WOW GREAT POEM!!!!!!!

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:30 pm
Molmanch1296 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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This was really interesting to read and I appreciated your connection!

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:29 pm
samisk3wl BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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this was really good! it had great imagery and it got across really strong feelings.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:29 pm
samisk3wl BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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this was really good! it had great imagery and it got across really strong feelings.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:18 am
laurapauline BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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i agree marz!

on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:17 am
laurapauline BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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This was a great poem with a good use of metaphors and personification, and all the descriptive words made it more interesting to read too. :)

marz42 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 6 2012 at 10:42 am
marz42 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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This poem was great. You were able to portray a beautiful, sensible, metaphor without dragging out the poem. The fact that it was short made it simple and realistic. VERY good job. yours should have been #1 not #4.!! :)

lxiao BRONZE said...
on Feb. 6 2012 at 9:46 am
lxiao BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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I love how simple this poem is. It comes to show how your simple words can portray such a strong message, and how the bully can hurt a person so easily through words.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 9:38 am
ellen5678 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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This poem has amazing imagery, with unique similies and metaphors!

on Feb. 6 2012 at 4:27 am
GingerLily BRONZE, Aulnay-sur-Mauldre, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world" - Oscar Wilde

This is so moving and beautiful. I love how you described the puddle of tears at the end.

on Jan. 30 2012 at 9:41 pm
laurensoccer SILVER, Palm Beach Gardens, Florida
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The imagery is amazing and your words flow perfectly. This is exceptional and one of the best poems I have ever read. Please keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!


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