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in your mouth
you fold your paper-thin words up
like origami and grin when they take flight
as paper cranes
hope swelling in the beating of their fragile wings
filling the spaces between us
and bursting in front of my eyes
leaving
drops of happiness trickling down
forming puddles by my feet.

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thewriter19 said...
today at 9:15 am:

Very good symbols. to this piece. I like the organization of the words. But the beggining to this one could be more strongly stated and comas are needed to make this piece a masterpiece

But one more thing really bothers me...Why is the name of this piece Liar. I feel like the emotion being expressed is more of a lonly feeling to it. I could not point out any symbols that connected Liar to the paper crane. I feel like this is describing something else other then being a "liar"

 
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RaviTeja said...
today at 6:05 am:
Wow that was very beautiful and elegant, yet very powerful!!!!! Very nice...
 
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RaviTeja said...
today at 6:05 am:
Wow that was very beautiful and elegant, yet very powerful!!!!! Very nice...
 
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RaviTeja said...
today at 6:05 am:
Wow that was very beautiful and elegant, yet very powerful!!!!! Very nice...
 
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Kitkat2013 said...
Apr. 12 at 10:58 am:
wow that was amazing:) its good to know that im not the only one who has felt the disgusting sting of lies...
 
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AnnoymousThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 28 at 9:39 am:
this was a great poem although i didnt know what it meant
 
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bmoney22 said...
Feb. 6 at 2:36 pm:
WOW GREAT POEM!!!!!!!
 
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Molmanch1296 said...
Feb. 6 at 2:30 pm:
This was really interesting to read and I appreciated your connection!
 
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samisk3wl said...
Feb. 6 at 2:29 pm:
this was really good! it had great imagery and it got across really strong feelings.
 
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samisk3wl said...
Feb. 6 at 2:29 pm:
this was really good! it had great imagery and it got across really strong feelings.
 
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laurapauline said...
Feb. 6 at 11:18 am:
i agree marz!
 
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laurapauline said...
Feb. 6 at 11:17 am:
This was a great poem with a good use of metaphors and personification, and all the descriptive words made it more interesting to read too. :)
 
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marz42 said...
Feb. 6 at 10:42 am:
This poem was great. You were able to portray a beautiful, sensible, metaphor without dragging out the poem. The fact that it was short made it simple and realistic. VERY good job. yours should have been #1 not #4.!! :)
 
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lxiao said...
Feb. 6 at 9:46 am:
I love how simple this poem is. It comes to show how your simple words can portray such a strong message, and how the bully can hurt a person so easily through words.
 
bmoney22 replied...
Feb. 6 at 2:38 pm :
hi linda ! :)
 
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ellen5678 said...
Feb. 6 at 9:38 am:
This poem has amazing imagery, with unique similies and metaphors!
 
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Lillie M. This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 6 at 4:27 am:
This is so moving and beautiful. I love how you described the puddle of tears at the end.
 
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laurensoccerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 30 at 9:41 pm:
The imagery is amazing and your words flow perfectly. This is exceptional and one of the best poems I have ever read. Please keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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GirlWhoWroteThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 15 at 7:20 pm:
Wow, this is really powerful! I'd be honored if you checked out my work :)
 
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otherpoetThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 10:13 pm:
So good! How did you think of such a great comparison. I would never be able to so creative. Thanks for writing!
 
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Fia-fiaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 9:59 pm:
This is wonderful, and a really fascinating way of getting your ideas across. i really really like it! Thank you :)
 
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sunshine7223This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:47 pm:
I really like this one. Nice word play! GREAT job Jamie! :)
 
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CompulsiveshoelaceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:47 pm:
The visual language is phenomonal, I can see the scene unfolding in my mind's eye! Please crritique my free verse "Reality's shroud" if you can, thanks, and again wonderful job!
 
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Noel_OrletThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 3:57 pm:
awesome....
 
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sweetheart2598This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 4:17 pm:

These are really good

NICE WORK

 

 
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Lacie101This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 10, 2011 at 10:27 pm:
i really like it. i wrote a poem about lies too. called Lies (but i don't think its up yet) but check it out when it is!
 
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Desti_BThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 10, 2011 at 8:38 pm:
i like it alot....my only criticism is that it seems like..a descriptive passage you would write in english class rather than a poem...which isn't necessarily bad...it's just how it came across to me 
 
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HayWayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 5:53 pm:
i love it!!! i wish i could right poetry like this!!
 
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Expressing_CharThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 10:02 am:
AMAZINGLY GLORIOUSLY STUNNING!
Please read some of mine!
 
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emilybwritesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 6:59 pm:
this was beautiful great imagery! please check out my poem "Forgotten Domain" and comment/rate it it would mean a lot!
 
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bbcly123 said...
May 16, 2011 at 6:02 pm:
TANGERINES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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bbcly123 said...
May 16, 2011 at 6:00 pm:
woody do your work
 
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silentlyspoken said...
Apr. 8, 2011 at 10:49 pm:
Beautiful.
 
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laaaurenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 11, 2011 at 12:23 pm:
this was so beautiful.
 
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alexis10297 said...
Feb. 17, 2011 at 1:40 pm:
I enjoyed reading this, NICE(: !!
 
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marcel said...
Jan. 19, 2011 at 11:46 am:
loved it!!!!!!!
 
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Zoe G. said...
Jan. 4, 2011 at 7:36 pm:
Amazing, loved it. check out Michael Donaghy if you get time! (irish american poet)
 
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BeautifulXWallflowerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 21, 2010 at 7:30 pm:
This is an amazing poem. You are a very talented writer =)
 
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WeAreOne said...
Nov. 21, 2010 at 2:54 pm:
This is beautiful, very powerful and makes complete sense.
 
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alexisabandonedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 16, 2010 at 11:35 am:
I really like this poem. I love how in poetry you can express a true feeling and it leaves the reader with the same feeling you had when you wrote it. Check out some of my work and keep writing! <3
 
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UrAnGelBabY said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 4:16 pm:
this is really nice................. it makes alot of sense........... great job
 
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PrincessPineapple said...
May 29, 2010 at 6:35 am:
AW! this is good. sad, but relatable. i know exactly how you feel! keep it up!
 
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BiancaMarie said...
May 7, 2010 at 6:02 pm:

yourr relee good hun! keep wrightingg! youvee deff got a talentt (: 

comment and ratee minee?

 
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Eilatan This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 2:13 pm:

WOW.

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Corinnee<3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 1:29 pm:
This has to be one of the best poems I've ever read! Love it! Never thought a smiple poem with just a few lines could mean something so deep and sound so amazing! Keep writing!:)
 
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abbey92This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 24, 2010 at 10:19 pm:
i really like this its really good
 
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mgraves This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 6:23 pm:
Awesome! I love the imagery! I've never tried using metaphors, but I think I'll give it a shot! :)
 
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annkaykay2011This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 9:31 am:
Its simple, dark underside and very deep. Its very good & it flows very well.
Keep it up=]
 
katielynn21 replied...
Mar. 2, 2010 at 5:30 pm :
wow. i really loved this, keep it up:)
check out my work sometime.
 
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the_HorsegirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 8, 2010 at 8:59 pm:
This is such a delicate poem. I love your word choice.
Please read my writing! I'd appreciate any comments!
 
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