Let Me Be You

May 11, 2012
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Let me clutch your tear stained-rags
and cardboard image of American flags
(which you thought meant something).
Your glued on scowl at the churlish rich
and cup of dimes in the earthy ditch
(which bought you my sorrow).
Let me own all your pain
Every burn, and scar, and stain,
so I can know what life would be
If my door to bliss held no key.

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applesauceHater said...
Dec. 19, 2012 at 9:48 pm
ahmigosh!!!!this is amazing!!!Im so sorry for the very late reply!!!!!!!!!!!!i cant believe i almost missed out on this
albinotiger said...
Jul. 18, 2012 at 9:17 am
Great topic and GREAT every moment from beginning to end!! (maybe check out my stuff sometime)
these-roses said...
May 27, 2012 at 10:35 am
i liked that you rythmed. its hard to do that and have it make sense( for me anyway)
Josika.Nav said...
May 27, 2012 at 9:18 am
hey ! amazing topic to write on! it is thoughtful and the pained tone was maintained throughout the poem. great work and keep writing :D
Kiki_McGee said...
May 25, 2012 at 3:42 pm
I love the topic of the poem and how you want to take that person's place. However, I don't care for the ( ) because I feel that it breaks up the feeling and rythm of the poem. Other than that, good job!
TheWeirdPoet said...
May 14, 2012 at 10:03 pm
This poem I especially enjoyed. It's a topic not usually written about. And if it was, it'd probably be a rant on "homeless being worthless", but instead you have a new and unique way of approaching it to the fact you'd wish to understand their life. Very unique.
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