Broken Heart

May 8, 2012
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I don’t know what happened,
I’m always thinking of you,
I’m not even sure that we really are done,
Even though we’re through.

When we were together,
I got so scared,
But you were always there for me,
Even when no one else cared.

Now I’m in a state of confusion,
Nothing is making any sense,
But I can’t stop myself from thinking,
You really were the best.

At first you were everything,
You were my whole world,
Then I wanted nothing to do with you,
And that’s when our relationship untwirled.

I hate seeing you hurt,
I know this is all my fault,
I can’t tell you how sorry I am,
That our relationship came to a halt.

I was never completely whole,
Even from the start,
Its hard to love someone,
When you already had a broken heart.

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Lacer said...
May 15, 2012 at 10:19 pm

The structure was off, which hurt the rhyming scheme again. Some sentences can be shortened, which would help. It's a poem, you can get away with being grammatically incorrect sometimes.

But I really do love the message of the poem; its timeless, which means that its overused, but everyone loves to see it every time we see it (when its done right, which it is here)

lilith27 said...
May 14, 2012 at 12:58 am
i luved it!!5/5
SkylerTheBrave said...
May 13, 2012 at 5:48 pm

I really enjoyed reading it. I could really feel the emotions your were trying to betray.  


Really good writing. 

satellite23 said...
May 13, 2012 at 5:46 pm

Pretty decent. Nice flow and rhythm.


I would appreciate it if you read one or more of the following articles: "How Do They Feel?", "Smiles", or my poem "Over the Hills"



Floyd7888 replied...
May 13, 2012 at 6:37 pm

Sure thing! And thanks for reading my poem! 


AliceStuckInReality said...
May 13, 2012 at 12:16 am
this is exactly how i feel sometimes..
DanielM. said...
May 12, 2012 at 8:10 pm
Awesome rhythm and awesome poem in general. I liked your message.
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