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I don’t know what happened,
I’m always thinking of you,
I’m not even sure that we really are done,
Even though we’re through.

When we were together,
I got so scared,
But you were always there for me,
Even when no one else cared.

Now I’m in a state of confusion,
Nothing is making any sense,
But I can’t stop myself from thinking,
You really were the best.

At first you were everything,
You were my whole world,
Then I wanted nothing to do with you,
And that’s when our relationship untwirled.

I hate seeing you hurt,
I know this is all my fault,
I can’t tell you how sorry I am,
That our relationship came to a halt.

I was never completely whole,
Even from the start,
Its hard to love someone,
When you already had a broken heart.



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Lacer said...
May 15, 2012 at 10:19 pm:

The structure was off, which hurt the rhyming scheme again. Some sentences can be shortened, which would help. It's a poem, you can get away with being grammatically incorrect sometimes.

But I really do love the message of the poem; its timeless, which means that its overused, but everyone loves to see it every time we see it (when its done right, which it is here)

 
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lilith27 said...
May 14, 2012 at 12:58 am:
i luved it!!5/5
 
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SkylerTheBrave said...
May 13, 2012 at 5:48 pm:

I really enjoyed reading it. I could really feel the emotions your were trying to betray.  

 

Really good writing. 

 
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satellite23 said...
May 13, 2012 at 5:46 pm:

Pretty decent. Nice flow and rhythm.

 

I would appreciate it if you read one or more of the following articles: "How Do They Feel?", "Smiles", or my poem "Over the Hills"

 

Thanks

 
Floyd7888 replied...
May 13, 2012 at 6:37 pm :

Sure thing! And thanks for reading my poem! 

 

 
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AliceStuckInReality said...
May 13, 2012 at 12:16 am:
this is exactly how i feel sometimes..
 
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DanielM. said...
May 12, 2012 at 8:10 pm:
Awesome rhythm and awesome poem in general. I liked your message.
 
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