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There used to be a pond
deep
blue
mystical
full of untold secrets
with the sun shining off
the clear surface.

We took the old rowboat out
back and forth
back and forth
we could do it
forever.

I thought the pond would be here
be my friend
relax me
comfort me
forever.

But
the rain
stopped
coming.

Now the pond
is gone
forever.

The land is dry
like a desert
with the sun beating down hard
forever.

There are no rainstorms
to soothe
the thirsty plants that have shriveled down.
ugly weeds taking over.

I hope
it’s not like this
forever.



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HaileyS This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 11, 2012 at 4:54 pm:
That was lovely! I really like the repetition, and you certainly succeeded at telling a story. I completely enjoyed this peice :) Keep it up!
 
ebrady replied...
Jun. 11, 2012 at 6:24 pm :
Thanks for you're feedback :) I'm glad you liked it!
 
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monky99 said...
May 23, 2012 at 2:30 pm:

Nice erin :) very metaphor like... heh heh heh...

i like the spacing... and yeah... cool

 
ebrady replied...
May 23, 2012 at 2:48 pm :
Thanks Alix... I'll never be as deep as you though...
 
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