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Ashes, Ashes,... I Fall Down

April 16, 2012
By Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now


Ashes, Ashes… I fall down- written by Amber Diaz

My soul,
one that use to be pure,
now has
been filled with such hatred
that my heart weighs me down.

Thee has weighed me down
with their
painful words that strike my heart.

Ashes, Ashes, I fall down.

I fall down crying…
I know people’s
words & opinions
do not matter,
but if it is people
you see everyday… it hurts.

Ashes, Ashes, I fall down.

You people ruin life.
You people have ruined a life.
Thee, you all have ruined my life.




You all have weighed me down,
weighed my down
to the chasm of death!

I once had a pure soul…

Ashes, Ashes, I fall down.

I wish I did fall
to my death.

Ashes, Ashes… I fall down.


The author's comments:
This poem is part of a book of poems that i am writing called Number 1 UNwanted.

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on Jun. 29 2012 at 1:15 am
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

thank you!  lol finially 14 lol

hey keep an eye out for my book (notice that i said book, not novel. book= nonfiction) i think i am going to call it Not a Tragedy


DJNATE said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 2:20 pm
DJNATE, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
The past was history, The future is a mystery, Today is a gift that's why it's called present












(Chinese Proverb)

hay amber how are u this is nate iv read the poems u put on recently and they are very cool keep it up

DJNATE said...
on Jun. 28 2012 at 2:20 pm
DJNATE, Chicago, Illinois
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
The past was history, The future is a mystery, Today is a gift that's why it's called present












(Chinese Proverb)

hay amber how are u this is nate iv read the poems u put on recently and they are very cool keep it up

InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 22 2012 at 7:13 pm
I like the ending. The chasm of death line was very poetic, dramatic, and powerful! Thanks for adding the explanation point; it adds meaning. I like the reoccuring Ashes, ashes, I fall down, but you might consider structuring the rest of the poem more. It isn't clear who Thee is here. I like using Thee, just clarify who that is. Also, painful words that strike this heart gives more emphasis than my heart (as just a sidenote revision). Anyway, overall this is great work. Powerful, passionate writing. :)

on Jun. 18 2012 at 10:26 am
vlad-hyde SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never lie, steal, cheat, or drink. if you must lie, lie in the arms of the one you love. If you must steal, steal away from bad company. If you must cheat, cheat death. And if you must drink, drink in the moments that take your breath away.Will Smith

Cant wait till the book comes out

on May. 2 2012 at 6:45 pm
JustPaperAndPencil BRONZE, Milford, Ohio
4 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
The saddest thing in the world, is loving someone who used to love you.

This is really good! I can feel the emotion you put into this! Great job! (:

on May. 2 2012 at 7:58 am
poetidea_myworld_22 PLATINUM, Rediville, South Carolina
39 articles 1 photo 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A girl doesn't need anyone who doesn't need her" Marylin Monroe

I love it... i can feel ur emotion:) its very deep and beautiful :)

DanielM. said...
on May. 1 2012 at 9:55 pm
Awesome Job!!! that was really good. I enjoyed your title. Very deep poem

DJNATE said...
on May. 1 2012 at 5:03 pm
DJNATE, Chicago, Illinois
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
The past was history, The future is a mystery, Today is a gift that's why it's called present












(Chinese Proverb)

this poem is a very deep poem and i love reading it. 

from; Nathon Shipman


on Apr. 26 2012 at 10:29 pm
InfinityandBeyond01 BRONZE, N/a, California
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Stay Strong! <3

The title caputre me. I'm going to be honset I wanted more. More of what you may ask and to tell you the truth I dont know. But I do like the idea alot and you make me want to read the book . So kudos to you ! Keep writing , Never give up!


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