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BALLOON!

I am like a balloon
On the outside colorful
On the inside empty
Very tall in appearance
But in reality its short
It can go anywhere
But is being being told what to do
It stands out in a crowd
But sometimes all it wants is to be invisible
I am like a balloon
put to much pressure on me and I will POP!




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lipglosser said...
Jul. 11, 2012 at 7:39 pm:
It was ok, I like it but I would add more to the poem.. Explain more on how it reflects you. Remember, put your heart into what you write, don't push yourself to think of a poem. Let it come to you. Take your time, no rush :) do these things and I am sure you could become a great poet
 
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AyeshaLiveLaughLove said...
Jul. 11, 2012 at 12:06 am:
Wonderfully written! I think this describes SO many positions I have been in my life and will continue to. Great work!(:
 
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JaymeRose said...
Jun. 8, 2012 at 9:27 pm:
I LIKE!! this is pre good
 
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katinthehat said...
May 16, 2012 at 1:02 pm:
omg i love this! its def. me, im a balloon xP lol really good job, keep writing
 
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hippiechick99 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 3:17 pm:

I love this poem, but I agree that you could have made it longer and used more imagry. I love reading your work; I hope you post more soon :))

Check out my work. PRETTY PLEASE!!!

 

 
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teamo14 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 10:21 am:
This poem is just perfect! It is so sad, but beautiful. Just like a baloon :)
 
somerandomperson replied...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 4:10 pm :
Thanks ^•^
 
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bearsfan654 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 10:21 am:
I love the rhythm of the poem, but I felt it needed some more imagery. 
 
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