Friend

April 15, 2012
By somerandomperson GOLD, Millstadt, Illinois
somerandomperson GOLD, Millstadt, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to destroy to be loved is to be destroyed~jace wayland
forever alone


The way i feel inside
Is something i want to hide
I do not know why
If i tell someone will they cry
Or laugh in my face
My mom would say "run a race"
Or would they send me away
So i would never see the light of day
i know what she'd do
You're probably thinking who
Katelyn my friend
Will always lend
Me a shoulder to cry on
She will be there to laugh with
And give me something to hit
And go with me to the place
where you hug your self
And that's all i need
Someone who feels how i feel


The author's comments:
This is my very first poem ever! comment please

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on Jun. 9 2012 at 5:01 pm
TheDarkSideOfTheMoon SILVER, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Dark is a way and light is a place,
Heaven that never was
Nor will be ever is always true

-Dylan Thomas,
"Poem on His Birthday"

The 'i' needs to be capital. Also, when you decide to use a style, it's best to stick with it the entire poem. So if you want it to ryme it's best you continue to do so, and other styles ect. Overall, it's a good poem. 

on Apr. 21 2012 at 12:10 pm
mandycandy28 BRONZE, O&#39Fallon, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Who says you're not perfect?" "Be Yourself"

So far, so good(:

on Apr. 19 2012 at 3:08 pm
hippiechick99 GOLD, Mesquite, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"... How dreary to be somebody-- How public like a frog;
To tell one's name; the livelong June-- To an admiring bog"
-Emily Dickinson

I get what you're saying, but in my opinion it would be a lot better if you added some more emotion to it. I think you're off to a good start. :))




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