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Friend

The way i feel inside
Is something i want to hide
I do not know why
If i tell someone will they cry
Or laugh in my face
My mom would say "run a race"
Or would they send me away
So i would never see the light of day
i know what she'd do
You're probably thinking who
Katelyn my friend
Will always lend
Me a shoulder to cry on
She will be there to laugh with
And give me something to hit
And go with me to the place
where you hug your self
And that's all i need
Someone who feels how i feel




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moonshadow said...
Jun. 9, 2012 at 5:01 pm:
The 'i' needs to be capital. Also, when you decide to use a style, it's best to stick with it the entire poem. So if you want it to ryme it's best you continue to do so, and other styles ect. Overall, it's a good poem. 
 
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mandycandy28 said...
Apr. 21, 2012 at 12:10 pm:
So far, so good(:
 
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hippiechick99 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 3:08 pm:
I get what you're saying, but in my opinion it would be a lot better if you added some more emotion to it. I think you're off to a good start. :))
 
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