Bits & Pieces

April 5, 2012
For a while we're whole, I think  
Then these things happen, these people happen  
We give ourselves away, because it feels so good.
Bits and pieces.
Then they take them, because it feels so good,
and maybe they're tired of giving.
And when they leave us,
we wonder why we feel so empty.
So we run around looking, desperate
for any bits and pieces.
Maybe we'll find them  

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IAmWhoIWantToBe said...
Apr. 23, 2012 at 11:48 pm
I like the meaning of this poem and I can relate to it in a way. Good job!
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile said...
Apr. 22, 2012 at 5:44 pm
i like it this was really cleaver how you took a figure of speech and brought it to life 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Apr. 22, 2012 at 12:17 am
I like your insights into love, about how we give little pieces of ourselves to people who only end up breaking our hearts.  Your grammar is excellent and the rhythm of your poem is good as well; I really see nothing wrong with this.  Keep up the good work!
Taconut7 said...
Apr. 21, 2012 at 1:25 pm

Really nice job! I could feel how you are talking about how we give ourselves to other people when we are in love, but when they break our hearts, they take a piece of yourself away somehow.

Keep up the great work!

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