Bits & Pieces

April 5, 2012
By eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
8 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh, and the world laughs with you;
Weep, and you weep alone.
For the sad old earth must borrow it's mirth,
But has trouble enough of its own.


For a while we're whole, I think  
Then these things happen, these people happen  
We give ourselves away, because it feels so good.
Bits and pieces.
Then they take them, because it feels so good,
and maybe they're tired of giving.
And when they leave us,
we wonder why we feel so empty.
So we run around looking, desperate
for any bits and pieces.
Maybe we'll find them  



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on Apr. 23 2012 at 11:48 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

I like the meaning of this poem and I can relate to it in a way. Good job!

on Apr. 22 2012 at 5:44 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

i like it this was really cleaver how you took a figure of speech and brought it to life 

on Apr. 22 2012 at 12:17 am
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

I like your insights into love, about how we give little pieces of ourselves to people who only end up breaking our hearts.  Your grammar is excellent and the rhythm of your poem is good as well; I really see nothing wrong with this.  Keep up the good work!

Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Apr. 21 2012 at 1:25 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein

Really nice job! I could feel how you are talking about how we give ourselves to other people when we are in love, but when they break our hearts, they take a piece of yourself away somehow.

Keep up the great work!



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