Sopposed To Tell You?

How am I supposed to tell you?
That my knees go weak,
My face goes red,
As you walk into the room

How am I supposed to tell you?
That my heart starts to pound,
My hands start to sweat,
As you glance toward me.

How am I supposed to let you know?
That the feelings I have for you are real?
How am I supposed to voice my opinions
about your deep coffee eyes,
and your smooth caramel skin.

How do I tell you?
To give me an answer,
It could be a note,
Or maybe a smile,
But,I need some response to help me now.

How am I not to die inside?
As you back away once you hear,
The truth of my desire,
The longing of my heart.

How am I supposed to tell you?
That you have broken my heart.





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Caleb.Andrews said...
Jun. 24, 2012 at 8:59 pm
Good poem! The imagery here is excellent! I could really tell that you wrote this from the heart. I especially like the way that you used both physical and emotional words to describe your situation. Great job!
 
Apollo77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 24, 2012 at 7:53 pm
I like the idea and the structure is pretty good, but the question marks bug me ALOT...they all seem in the wrong spots and are cutting sentenes in half wierdly...your phrasing needs work, but i like the WORDS in it...
 
Eirias said...
Jun. 15, 2012 at 8:07 pm

I like the feel of this poem, but there are several awkward bits (in other words, thank you for asking my help on something I can actually help on!). First off, you misspelled the title.

stanza 1-- you missed a period at the end. I also like the assonance (you/room)

stanza 2-- "to pound" breaks the rhythm . . . the accent of the next word should fall where the "to" is (syllable-wise). I am looking to get that assonace again, because you set the precedent in the first stanza. You... (more »)

 
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