What We Were Before

April 3, 2012
By WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...


So many times you've looked at me,
Denying it all, 
Everything...
Watching me shatter beneath the beauty you speak,
Making me dream that each word was for me...
Only me...
Alone.
Why, sweet love,
Haven't you had enough pain?
Dear, my...
Why are you my only desire?
Can't I look away from such eyes?
A blue sea of seduction and simpleness,
I've allowed myself to drown...
Far beyond the surface of all I thought we were,
Deeper...
Just deeper...
And still alone...

Always...
Never yours again...
My darling,
Save me...
Kiss me...

Just one last glittering sensation,
Before you leave me,

To cry,
Sink...
Into What We Were Before.


The author's comments:
Eyes are so beautiful, aren't they? Especially Blue(: this is about how I see someone, how I adore him, bit he can't see it in himself, so I basically am drowning in not my pain, but his. Because he doesn't see how beautiful he is to me.

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Shivam GOLD said...
on Apr. 21 2012 at 2:34 am
Shivam GOLD, Lucknow, Other
19 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
Its nothing like nothing or all.. its just that how far you climb up the tree before you fall..

written by heart, a beautiful break-up poem... gr8

on Apr. 17 2012 at 11:34 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you! Can you check out my other work and comment on those too? I'd really appreciate it!(: I'll check out yours too!

on Apr. 17 2012 at 11:28 pm
MissKrissyKat BRONZE, Peebles, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
I don't need no one's help cause i can bless myself, no one else can help, but me, myself, and I!

Omg this is really good, and i feel like it was written for what i feel. I really love this! :)

raeee GOLD said...
on Apr. 8 2012 at 6:20 pm
raeee GOLD, Walla Walla, Georgia
15 articles 3 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Would she hear me if I called her name? Would she hold me if she knew my shame? Would she even love me if I was to blame?" -Favourite poem ever♥

Okay, here's that comment i promised. (: 

this is by far the best i've ever read. i love the way you write  it's phenomonal. absolutely. i felt all the emotion that was written in this piece, and let me tell you, i'm pretty sure all girls have seen what you've written, and many boys for that matter. well done, keep it up (:


on Apr. 6 2012 at 12:56 pm
PoetryMaster BRONZE, Ottawa, Other
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Favorite Quote:
-A bird does not sing because it has an answer; it sings because it has a song.
- We make a living by what we get; we make a life by what we give
- The summit of happiness is reached when a person is ready to be what he is.

This makes me want to cry :')

on Apr. 6 2012 at 10:32 am
TheGirlWhoReachesForStars SILVER, Morrisville, North Carolina
6 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Imperfection is beauty; madness is genius.
and its better to be absolutely ridiculous
than absolutely boring.\"
-Marilyn Monroe

oh wow... this poem... this is just, exactly how i feel... wow Written :) you've outdone yourself

on Apr. 5 2012 at 10:18 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
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Amazing. I can really relate to this right now. It's just ugh. I know exactly the feeling being discribed her. Wow. i can't even form real thoughts here, on how this hit my heart. Amazing. Simply, Amazing

on Apr. 5 2012 at 8:11 pm
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
4 articles 2 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

I love the words "what we were before" I think u made the emotions u felt wen u wrote this come across very well. Good job, good job, good jb. AGAIN!


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