Half a Future

March 30, 2012
By wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
wordbeater SILVER, Sharpsburg, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Truth is beauty and beauty truth, that is all ye know on earth and all ye need to know.

Keats


I've lived and died
ten thousand times
spread before my eyes
the blades of knives
thin and alive
like a slit of an eye
I've seen them web
cobweb thin spread
down on a toddler's head
I've seen them weep
and course and weep
that one day I didn't sleep
a week, so weak
I've seen them dribble in
fine skin spread like veins
like light and pains
like light through panes
and pains whispering
delicate sweet refrains
soft promises, wrinkles
on the palms of my skin
Whispering so whisper thin.


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on Apr. 16 2012 at 1:58 pm
Dylan.Burkhart SILVER, Evansville, Indiana
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I found the flow incredible for this poem

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 11 2012 at 1:43 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! the poem has amazing sentence structures and a good rhyme scheme. it flows really well.  it also has multiple meanings and a certain depth in it. great work and keep writing ! XD

on Apr. 10 2012 at 9:57 pm
gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"next time you feel like a failure, think about how you are alive, and you have the opportunity to be successful."

"i don't have an attitude, i have a personality you can't handle"

"i am weird"

great job, you are a really strong writer :)

schan GOLD said...
on Apr. 7 2012 at 8:25 pm
schan GOLD, Taipei, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Let us permit nature to have her way. She understands her business better than we do.”
-Michel de Montaigne

I've never really seen this type of rhyming, so I think it's really unique. The repetition makes the word all the more powerful. Well done!

on Apr. 6 2012 at 6:35 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

Nice!  You're a much better poet than I am!  I loved the rhyming and homophones.


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