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Strings of Gravity

the silver moon
acts as though it is on a string
but is it
when it hangs in the sky?
just like the sun in the middle of the day,
a bright yellow circle
acting as though it is held on a string
but that string
would have to be a strong string
that string
is known to us as gravity



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Ranea said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 7:27 pm:
wicked! i liked the metophors but it kinda felt unfinished in the sence that it didnt have a clean end, but it was still wickedly great!!
 
koolkat101love replied...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 7:44 pm :
Thanks. I'll think of a better end, as it is a bit abrupt and it does feel unfinished. Thanks. :)
 
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eternal_sunshine said...
Apr. 5, 2012 at 8:09 pm:
Interesting. I liked how you used a metaphor for something so basic that we're all taught. Now every time I see the moon I will think of that haha. Really well written, and I liked the repetitve part of "acting" as if it was on a string. Nice job :)
 
koolkat101love replied...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 7:09 pm :
Thank you! :)
 
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