Strings of Gravity

March 22, 2012
By koolkat101love SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
koolkat101love SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"My thoughts are stars I cannot fathom into constellations."


the silver moon
acts as though it is on a string
but is it
when it hangs in the sky?
just like the sun in the middle of the day,
a bright yellow circle
acting as though it is held on a string
but that string
would have to be a strong string
that string
is known to us as gravity


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on Apr. 6 2012 at 7:44 pm
koolkat101love SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"My thoughts are stars I cannot fathom into constellations."

Thanks. I'll think of a better end, as it is a bit abrupt and it does feel unfinished. Thanks. :)

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on Apr. 6 2012 at 7:27 pm
Ranea GOLD, Elkhart, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"It can always be worse, so put on a happy face and laugh!" (my own quote) &
"Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words may scar my soul."

wicked! i liked the metophors but it kinda felt unfinished in the sence that it didnt have a clean end, but it was still wickedly great!!

on Apr. 6 2012 at 7:09 pm
koolkat101love SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"My thoughts are stars I cannot fathom into constellations."

Thank you! :)

on Apr. 5 2012 at 8:09 pm
eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh, and the world laughs with you;
Weep, and you weep alone.
For the sad old earth must borrow it's mirth,
But has trouble enough of its own.

Interesting. I liked how you used a metaphor for something so basic that we're all taught. Now every time I see the moon I will think of that haha. Really well written, and I liked the repetitve part of "acting" as if it was on a string. Nice job :)




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