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Windows by NamesKill.

February 28, 2012
By NamesKill. BRONZE, Plymouth, Other
NamesKill. BRONZE, Plymouth, Other
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Favorite Quote:
One of my favourites is......

'Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.'
- Dr. Seuss


Shatter, pitter-patter. Won’t open, or close, it’s stuck, problems arose and its bad luck. Step on a black cat, walk under a ladder, got something wrong with you, because you can’t stop emptying your bladder. I try to sympathise, so I panic, I now do it naturally; it’s a bit of a habit. I try to put myself in other’s shoes, because even when I’m wearing my own I haven’t got a clue, so at least if I’m wearing somebody else’s shoes, I have a better reason… well really it’s more of an excuse. I brush myself off; tell myself I’m okay, think about having no fear, when really I’m petrified, even worse than afraid. I remind you that you’re not a parasite, you’re more like dynamite, and you’re fit to explode, but you find a way to retain some control. You think of yourself as a dino, when I see more of a rhino, in you. It is a façade, your pretend rough exterior, it seems like you have motives and they appear to be ulterior. I’ve made the assumption that you’re truly a good person, but if you don’t soon openly act that way, things will become over-complicated and your condition might even worsen. I’m only looking out for you, why do you not get where I’m at? I’m not discarding you like the others did, so please at least respect that.

The author's comments:
I used to write poems all the time, I tend not to have the chance anymore but occasionally I like to just play around. I came up with this by thinking of a really boring word, which in this case was the word 'Windows' and then continuously just inserted things that sprung to mind even if they have no relevance. I don't usually do so but I felt like intentionally for no reason whatsoever other than for the fun of it, I tried to slot in as many rhymes as possible without sounding too tacky (I hope). This was just a quick thing, that I wrote in a few minutes, I tend to take more time but I was bored and had a few minutes spare.

Hope you enjoy! Thanks, NamesKill. :)

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KateLA GOLD said...
on Apr. 17 2012 at 5:51 pm
KateLA GOLD, Everett, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Don’t you find it Funny that after Monday(M) and Tuesday(T), the rest of the week says WTF?
-Unknown

I like how it progresses as your thinking changes-I love it when I see other people getting so creative and doing something different! 5/5! The rhyming was a good addition to it by the way :-)

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on Apr. 14 2012 at 3:59 pm
deleted, Miami, Florida
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Really nice, but my only comment would be that it's unclear as to what you're trying to say and the format is a little hard to read. Maybe break it up a little more. But nice rhymes and word choice :)

on Mar. 25 2012 at 1:07 pm
NamesKill. BRONZE, Plymouth, Other
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
One of my favourites is......

'Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.'
- Dr. Seuss

Thank you very much Loveissmiles!!... I agree, I do even write the simplest of things with a tone of unusuality :)

Thanks, I'm glad you feel that way, I would be more than happy to give you some more feedback on your work!

Thank you once more for your comments this has been of much use to me... Again nothing has been approved by T.I as of yet but I shall let you know straight away if/when any of my pieces do & I would be very happy if you fedback to me on them too. =)

Speak soon!... NamesKill.


on Mar. 20 2012 at 9:29 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

Oh my goodness nameskill, this is beautiful. Wierd, abnormal even, but beautiful. I love this. I love the way it feels like someone is just talking to me. Personally, i think that's a very good quality in poetry. It is extremely well written, and if you would please give me some feedback on some of my other pieces. I would mean so much to me.

 

I am very sad to hear that your submissions are not going through right, i was really looking forward to reading more of your work. You are an incredible author to say the lease, and i hope to see more by you soon. If you could comment and let me know when something gets approved i would love that so i could definately give you some feedback. :)