The Letter

February 15, 2012
By ellisak GOLD, Olathe, Kansas
ellisak GOLD, Olathe, Kansas
10 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Wise men talk because they have something to say; fools, because they have to say something." - Plato


She wished one Christmas
That all would be alright
Sometimes she cries at night
She can’t seem to find the light
The pencil in her hand
She wished was completely banned
Her hand shook like an earthquake
She hoped it wasn’t too late
The pencil fell down
And she spun around
Only a light sound
Had scared her out of jumping out
Finished her letter
Thought it couldn’t get better
Laid it down under the tree
Said it was just for me
The next morning come
And she was just so young
When I read that slip of paper
Tears seemed to fall like vapor
Her voice played in my head
It said she should be dead
She was just that girl who tried to be
Like everyone who shut her down
This Christmas can go on without me
And so I prayed that day
That she would be okay
Up there in heaven above
Like an angel, kind of
I knew she’d been so sad
But not that bad
Tears kept raining down
Like the snow down town
That Christmas morning was sorry
It couldn’t help but not be starry
The sky looked down in sadness
It drove me to madness
And so I prayed and prayed
Until you came down to my aid
Said she was alright but shaken up
She was like a little wolf pup
And I thanked you then
And I said amen
But I knew
It would all go askew

Sometimes life can pull you down
Sometimes you run out of nouns
Can’t finish a story, you had already started
But I was too fainthearted…



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ellisak GOLD said...
on Mar. 5 2012 at 4:06 pm
ellisak GOLD, Olathe, Kansas
10 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Wise men talk because they have something to say; fools, because they have to say something." - Plato

Thank You! I'm glad it inspired you!

on Mar. 5 2012 at 1:42 pm
xoSamanthaxo GOLD, New York, New York
12 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Forget all the rules. Forget about being published. Write for yourself and celebrate writing."
-Anonymous

I disagree, Jordan. Sometimes poets use a variety of writing patterns to draw emphasis or create mood. It is perfectly fine the way it is and i woudn't change it. 

on Mar. 5 2012 at 1:40 pm
xoSamanthaxo GOLD, New York, New York
12 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Forget all the rules. Forget about being published. Write for yourself and celebrate writing."
-Anonymous

This is amazing. I. Love. It. INSPIRING!!!!

ellisak GOLD said...
on Mar. 2 2012 at 9:27 pm
ellisak GOLD, Olathe, Kansas
10 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Wise men talk because they have something to say; fools, because they have to say something." - Plato

Thank You!

on Mar. 2 2012 at 5:18 pm
AbigailElizabeth SILVER, Medina, Minnesota
8 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Scars are souvenirs you never lose" - Goo Goo Dolls

Okay this blew me away. It really did. You're a fantastic poet. It's almost perfection! Never give up on writing:)

on Mar. 1 2012 at 6:51 pm
Writer_Jordan GOLD, Ellicott City, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 183 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost.
From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king.

overall, the poem is very good. But keep a steady rhyming pattern throughout your story. The first few lines dont fit the AA BB pattern that you had for the rest of the story. Good job though!


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