El Mundo de Agua

February 21, 2012
Raindrops are not so pretty on the ground.
The bubble is popped and fragments lay strewn for monsters to crawl over.
The black storm engulfs the ships, and leaves crackle under trodding rainboots.
Cement sidewalks blend with muddy rolling hills.
And oh how sad do the houses look when they cannot blink the tears out of there glassy eyes.
No, raindrops are not so pretty on the ground.





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thetruthawaits94 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 7:08 pm
I love the way you write! IT's so perfectly poetic. You have a great voice in your poetry. I love the metaphor- I'm a sucker for using metaphor. In almost all my poetry there is some form of metaphor there. This is awesome! Great job!
 
thetruthawaits94 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 23, 2012 at 7:09 pm
PLus, your word choice is wonderful. Great vocabulary! :)
 
kelseycascadia replied...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 12:53 am
Thanks! I really appreciate the feedback. I'm so glad that you noticed the metaphors, that's one of my main goals with my poetry.
 
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