Ugly is Life

February 21, 2012
By Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"


H*** rips open.
The d***ed suck the marrow dry.
Maggots they all are

All the wh***s-

All the sinners-

All the hypocrites and liars a like.

Father dear,
Mother dearest
Condemned us all
Under false pretenses-
Under whim-
Under blame-
Under hate.

Who knows?
Who cares?
The damage is done,
and undoable.

So now I’m trapped here,
In this box
as it gets smaller and smaller.
Just waiting-

Begging-

Yearning
For the day I finally suffocate.
To join the free in eternal rest

Free of all the pain of living-

Free of all the torment of feeling-

Free of all the never-ending agony of these chains that confine us all.

But for now I ache…



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butterfly123 said...
on May. 19 2012 at 1:18 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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very powerful and strong. i like the tone of disgust and the dark depth. awesome piece and keep writing !

on May. 7 2012 at 8:00 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

The intensity of this poem still hasn't sunk in yet. Each word is powerful and in saying this, the whole message is "uber-powerful" (if that was a word). Anyway, ncie job man!!

on Apr. 30 2012 at 6:16 am
Eowyngreen SILVER, Metamora, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't want to be forgotten, shortly after you are dead and rotten, either do something worth writing, or write something worth reading."
~Benjamin Franklin

Wow, very profound and gutsy, I like it al lot.  I like the strong words you used, they really helped to pack the punch of the meaning in this poem.

on Mar. 29 2012 at 8:48 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 348 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Wow, amazing! So much talent! Great Job! I read it twice, Lol!

on Mar. 19 2012 at 9:13 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

Behind_a_plastic_smile:

I already commented on this one. :)


on Mar. 10 2012 at 11:22 am
dreamshaker GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
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wow. this was really powerful.

I loved it - I think I've said this before, but it's true: you have a tremendous amount of talent.

on Mar. 6 2012 at 11:49 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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I don't know what to say:(and that's sad because for someone like you  to have such writing skills, you deserve no less. This poem is powerful and slaps some truth in peoples face. You have some very neat writing powers!

on Mar. 6 2012 at 5:18 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

ya ill be happy to and thank you all for the feedback its so greatly appreciated 

asofnow GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 4:06 pm
asofnow GOLD, Troy, Michigan
18 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing gold can stay ~ Robert Frost

This is really good but the beginnning left me confused and the ending really tied everything together.

on Mar. 6 2012 at 3:00 pm
FutureSceneQueen BRONZE, Amherst, Ohio
4 articles 14 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do what you love or die unhappy -m.shadows from avenged sevenfold

This is really good. you have a beautiful talent :)

on Mar. 6 2012 at 2:27 pm
JackTElliott BRONZE, Austin, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Can't is a curse in this household." -Dad

This is pretty good, I can tell you have alot in your head. Keep it up! (PS, mind checking out my poem Isolation? I really want some feedback thanks :P)

Kinzi GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 1:04 pm
Kinzi GOLD, Cairo, Other
11 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is some good in this world, and it's worth fighting for.” -J.R.R. Tolkien

“I have found the paradox, that if you love until it hurts, there can be no more hurt, only more love.” -Mother Teresa

Whoo. loveissmiles put it very well. Had to read that few times.. but not because it was  hard to get, but because there's something about it that makes you really try and think. 

 

Awesome. Really loved the word choice as well.


on Mar. 5 2012 at 10:19 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

I will admit that i had to read this a few times. Not because it was confusing or hard to undstand, but because they is something in the way it was written that grabbed hold of me and refused to let go. I love the idea, and the way it was conveyed, just wish you hadn't been censored, i think it would have really added to the dramatic effect of the piece. But that's not something you can change.

on Feb. 24 2012 at 7:36 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1401 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

It's an intense poem---the word choice leaves me impressed, especially the last ten or so lines. The only thing I would suggest is that you start the poem with "All the sinners--." I just think it would grab the reader more. Since you've been censored, I was a little confused in the beginning of the poem. But great job otherwise~

on Feb. 23 2012 at 11:27 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

darn-I just realized I was censored well just incase it's hard to figure out which I'm sure it isn't the words are: -H. E. ll -däMñed -wH0rę


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