Fear.

February 6, 2012
By 11swimer4life SILVER, Leawood, Kansas
11swimer4life SILVER, Leawood, Kansas
5 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to be in the world


Fear
I know he is behind me,
He is walking as fast as I am.
I look back and he is only a few feet behind me,
His face pale with black hair,
While in a black cape that’s flapping in the wind.
I start with a sprint and I hear him creeping up on me,
My legs start to tremble,
My stomach is filled with butterflies,
My eyes start to water,
He makes me feel like collapsing.
He is breathing down my back,
He is telling me to be afraid.
I can no longer stand up to him,
I start to slow down and let him over come me.
Everything is getting darker and,
Finally its over.

The author's comments:
I wrote this in my creative writing class just for fun.

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on Feb. 11 2012 at 1:27 am
11swimer4life SILVER, Leawood, Kansas
5 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to be in the world

I didnt really want "him" to be the main factor of the poem, it was supost to be all in my head but thanks :)

on Feb. 11 2012 at 1:26 am
11swimer4life SILVER, Leawood, Kansas
5 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to be in the world

the man was suppost to be all in my mind, i dont want him to be extra creepy

-Ash- SILVER said...
on Feb. 10 2012 at 12:47 pm
-Ash- SILVER, Redmond, Washington
7 articles 4 photos 49 comments

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She wants to die. She wants to disappear, to be remembered no more. She wants so terribly to be forgotten, all her mistakes, all her failures, everything. Her name to be wiped free from all record of existence. Because is it really existing when you’ve got nothing to show for your life?

it was good, but i agree that you could have worked on building up him so he is even more creepy. but it was still creepy and a really cool poem! :)

on Feb. 10 2012 at 1:45 am
Purplefilly SILVER, Medford, Oregon
6 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Todo se vale en amor y la guerra.

And since you know you cannot see so well as by reflection, I, your glass, will modestly discover to yourself, that of yourself, which you yet know not of.

I enjoyed this, but I feel like you could have built "him" up a little bit more; made "him" more creepy (which the person was!). I love it though!! :)

on Feb. 9 2012 at 8:47 am
11swimer4life SILVER, Leawood, Kansas
5 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to be in the world

Haha thanks! I was going for creepy and almost bone chilling effect when people read this! Thanks for commenting

Kipitama GOLD said...
on Feb. 9 2012 at 8:43 am
Kipitama GOLD, Council Bluffs, Iowa
12 articles 0 photos 229 comments

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"An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind." (Bartoletti, Campbell)

Whoa. I think my heart skipped a beat. Great job.

on Feb. 8 2012 at 7:55 pm
11swimer4life SILVER, Leawood, Kansas
5 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to be in the world

hey if u can leave a comment that would be greattttttt!!!


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