The Story

February 1, 2012
By Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
11 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life leaves us blind, Love keeps us kind.


My mother,
Once told me a story,
On the hillside,
When I was only nine;

One of radiance,
Inner beauty of sorts,
Of a perfection,
That would be mine;

If I would believe,
Hold on through it all,
The strongest storms,
Or the blissful nights;

But one night,
Was not so blissful,
I watched her go,
As I screamed in fright;

I then knew,
From that night,
That the story she told,
Of love and glory;

Was only a reminder of,
Her own false hope,
And I, myself,
Let go of the story;



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on Feb. 20 2012 at 11:25 am
Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
11 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life leaves us blind, Love keeps us kind.

Wow thank you! The commas after every line and semicolon ending every stanza is just how I format my poetry. Before I started to write on my computer, I would write poems on my phone whenever I was on the road or wherever and felt inspired, I would just write what I felt. I used the commas to distinguish lines and the semicolons to distinguish stanzas. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my work. Thank you :)

on Feb. 18 2012 at 1:28 am
jasont727 PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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Favorite Quote:
If there was no change, there would be no butterflies.

Wow, this piece is absolutely beautiful. I'm such a grammar nerd, but I love the way that you used the commas after each line even if they were unnecessary and how each stanza ended with a semicolon. It really brought a unique flair to the cadence and the piece as a whole. Also, the words itself were lovely. I was expecting an ending that was a bit different, perhaps something concerning how the story that you had been told your whole life had all been a lie and that led you to a sort of depression-like state; I'm glad that you ended it this way, which seems a bit less tragic and with even a sense of resignation. All in all, a beautiful piece, thank you!


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