The Bird

January 29, 2012
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Fluttering down
Making hardly a sound,
I bow with mock sympathy.
Beneath my claws
A woman sobs,
Her tears --
Not staining me.

'Oh Torturous Heart!'
She wails into the dark,
'Why must you ache?
Why must you feel?'

No answer comes
But my simple remark.

She whispers.
'Hateful you are!
You made me this way you know!'

I grin --
Ever-joyful --
And ruffle my feathers.
I know she has more left to say.

'I never knew --
Never had a life
Outside this cage!'
She screeched at me.
'You knew from the start
That I --
I would never soar.'

I cackled at this.
How ignorant she is;
How ignorant they are.
Trying to be unique,
They resist me.
Resist until they snap
And end up --
A broken wing --
The cause.
A love --
The loss.

Eyes twinkling
Like rubies red,
I sidle up close
To my dear, little friend.

'Like those before you
And others yet to come,'
My voice scratched.
'Cast away to the depths:
Your Body --
Your Heart --
Free your soul,'
Whispered I,
'And Die.'

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Dynamo This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 4, 2012 at 4:00 am
Sorry for the delay, but here I am.^_^ First of all, this was Awesome. And I mean it. Not many would make a theme out of so simple an animal. But you did it, and three cheers for you!   Now let's get on to more serious matters. You have a unique style, but glitches, such as those you(I think so) mistakenly added aren't actually great. There is a definitive plot line, but at some places it gets lost. Not that it causes avctual harm though. You soar back to the crest of the musica... (more »)
Kiki_McGee replied...
Oct. 11, 2012 at 8:56 am
Thanks for your honest review :) If it is possible, could you please telling me where you think the plot line gets a little muddied so that I can keep an eye out in later poems?
Black_Rose_Princess said...
Aug. 26, 2012 at 2:51 am
You're writing style is unique, that's for sure. And you do have a voice of your own. I especially like how you describe thing, even the simplest things in the most interesting and creative ways! And I agree with Meonly, this did remind me a bit of Poe and a tad bit of Sylivia Plath. This, like your other piece, is amazing and I truly loved it! Continue writing, you definitely have a talent for it!
Kiki_McGee replied...
Oct. 12, 2012 at 11:16 am
Thanks.  I really liked your running poem.
Meonly said...
Aug. 16, 2012 at 3:56 pm
I could see this in a poetry book... and i don't know many poet authors but it reminds me a bit of adgar allen poe !
Kiki_McGee replied...
Aug. 16, 2012 at 11:19 pm
Thank you. It was inspired by the last chapter of The Awakening
Indiewriter This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 15, 2012 at 5:59 pm
you're really talented! it has a really unique style of writing.
Kiki_McGee replied...
Aug. 16, 2012 at 11:21 pm
Thanks. I really like some of your works too.
realbeautifulheart said...
Aug. 15, 2012 at 3:49 pm
Amazing! You sould like a professional. I absoluetly loved every second of it. The depth and perseption, the darker mood, everthing. Every word flowed perfectly. Keep writing!!!
Kiki_McGee replied...
Aug. 16, 2012 at 11:24 pm
Thank you so much. Now that I look back on this poem, however, I see so many places that I could have smoothed over better or improved on.
Artemisia said...
Feb. 15, 2012 at 8:12 pm
This is fantastic! It's so dark, deep and beautiful at the same time. I have a feeling this poem is going to be stuck in my head for awhile. I love the way it flows. Amazing job!
SteelJam said...
Feb. 15, 2012 at 5:55 pm
This was really good! I could feel the emotion! This is great!
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