Suicide

January 28, 2012
By PotterCullen BRONZE, Dobbs Ferry, New York
PotterCullen BRONZE, Dobbs Ferry, New York
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Lugging broken hearts,
So overwhelming,
These tough times,
Struggling to be perfect,
A perfect son,
A perfect brother,
A perfect nephew,

A tightly shut heart,
A tightly shut mind,
Thoughts,
Coming from where?
Stuck,
Depressed,
Under overwhelming pressure,
All gone.

Broken hearts
Left
Sure to be caught


In



The




Wind.


The author's comments:
My cousin's death inspired me to write this poem.

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on Feb. 21 2012 at 8:21 am
celebeauty1 SILVER, Newark, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"fight till you get to the TOP!" written by me

" i am not who you think I am. my people are not who you think they are. our culture and traditions are unknow to you.
so put your brews and blunts on pause. rock with me for a few" Sister Souljah

geart job! i love it

 


illusions GOLD said...
on Feb. 3 2012 at 3:06 pm
illusions GOLD, I Dontg Even Like This Town, Other
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this is beautiful! i really like this! plz check out mine and comment plz

on Feb. 3 2012 at 8:57 am
AngelsKiss PLATINUM, Paris, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
You have the power to live another Childhood, so open up the door leaving back your doubts.

very good poem clipped, but expressive and to the point 5/5 please read and comment on some of my poems

Phoenix. said...
on Feb. 3 2012 at 4:25 am
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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great job many can relate also>!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 9:35 am
ashleyX13 PLATINUM, Memphis, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"I've made mistakes; not one regret." Alyssa Nicolson

beautiful! i really liked the ending! strong work, keep it up

on Feb. 1 2012 at 9:33 pm
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
6 articles 9 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." - Audrey Hepburn

This is impressive poetry. You should be proud of yourself, and so should your cousin. He's in a better place now. This is a great poem, full of thoughtfulness and feeling. Great work!

on Feb. 1 2012 at 12:08 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

sorry I posted it twice

on Feb. 1 2012 at 12:07 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

This is a really good poem. It was very emotional and it was well structured. Could you please check out some of my work? Thanx

on Feb. 1 2012 at 12:06 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

This is a really good poem. It was very emotional and it was well structured. Could you please check out some of my work?

on Jan. 31 2012 at 9:35 pm
loveyourselfforwhoyouare BRONZE, Jasper, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
"Life isn't about finding yourself, it's about creating yourself." ~ Author Unknown

This is a really good poem. I love it. You should write more you're really good at it.

on Jan. 31 2012 at 5:35 pm
TheQueenOfLiberty PLATINUM, Mason City, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't Hate The Person, But The Choices They Make,"













By: TheQueenOfLiberty

wow i felt the hairs on my arms raise up

on Jan. 31 2012 at 3:00 pm
BlurredReflection BRONZE, Beaverton, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
\\\"Giving up doesn\\\'t always mean your weak, sometimes it just means your strong enough to let go.\\\"

I really like this. I like your word choice and im sure many can relate to this. I can. I went through some tough times. but honestly, this piece is very honest and the feelings really come through.

on Jan. 31 2012 at 11:03 am
Karles_Ivy PLATINUM, Sunnyside, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the bully isn’t the captain of the cheerleaders or the girl who for some reason has it out for only you; sometimes the worst bully of them all is you.- Karles_Ivy

This is truly amazing and heartfelt. I can relate to this. I have a cousin who attempted suicide while on substance abuse. I'm really sorry for your cousin. It's the ones who stay alive that feel the pain.


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